The Break Up song

I hate that I made you cry.

I hate that you want to die.

What is there for me to do?

When I’ve lost all my love for you!

Was I meant to keep pretending?

Have you a fake happy ending...

You should know that, that’s not me.

I just couldn’t be what you wanted me.

 

I can’t take it anymore,

So I’ll just sit here on the floor

Thinking back to when we met,

I just wanted all of that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

Baby, that’s what you called me,

Maybe that’s what you wanted

But it’s too late.

It’s too late.

I hope one day,

You’ll forget the pain

And learn how to love again,

Learn it all again.

 

I can’t do this anymore,

Don’t come knocking at my door.

You thought I was perfect,

And I just couldn’t take that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

I can’t be her anymore.

Not the one that you adore

I can’t take it anymore,

I put a lock on my door,

I can’t take it,

You can’t fake it.

I’m not her,

I’m not her.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

We were wrong..

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing a song...

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

Very sad feeling. Eventually someone's perception can be mixed because they are blinded by the love for that person. I have no idea if this relates to What you're feeling inside but love is a veil that obscures visions. With that said, love also can make things clear. Even the most terrible people find love, and we are not all perfect. Everyone has their own perception of perfect. Very lovely poem :)

[Krista Weiss]

Really good!! :)

[dillonjensen]

Quite the write, miss! I like it a lot because I feel like I can relate to this so much. Also, it flows well as a song I think. Writing verses and having a hook are often the hardest parts, but once you've found the hook/chorus, the rest just flows easily! Well done.

[samantha]

i loved it amazing!

[MOON]

Lyrical lovely write.

[Jordan Easley]

Nice job. It is really hard to write a good song with a clear message that looks good on paper and sounds good with a melody. I think you did a good job though. I was singing the song in my head while I was reading :) It also made a nice poem. This was pretty good for a song/poem :)

[quixotic_rose]

I could definitely see this as a song, I've never been good with reading into the meaning of lyrics but I like yours a lot. Also, I guess its a poem as well haha, although I don't generally see them intertwined together often, or maybe its just the music i listen to that doesn't hold rhymes of poetry to them. Great work on this though, very powerful. Loved it :)

[justjenn_2u]

Before I read that this was a song, I felt it inside that this was quite lyrical. Way to go and I enjoyed this piece.

[emman]

Oh my God!This is such a VERY GOOD POEM! This is really like a song :)

VERY GOOD! :)

[Fiona]

Wow, I really enjoyed this. If you do play instruments of some sort and you want to eventually publish it, I would change the title. Otherwise, I wouldn't change anything about it and think it has a great rhythm and would make an excellent song that I would definately download :)