The first Time.

A poem about one of the things a girl will remember for the rest of her life.

Will you be gentle?

Will you be kind?

WIll  you love me, when you are mine?

 

Entwined, our souls ignite

as we are tighly embraced,

My heartbeat mimicks the rhythm of yours

You grab onto my exposed flesh,

I can feel my want for you growing.

 

Will you be gentle?

Will you be kind?

Will you love me, when you are mine?

 

I'm scared, I'm ready

Your kiss, Your love,

are you sure you have a glove?

I think it's time, I think We're ready.

 

Will you be gentle?

Will you be kind?

Will you love me, when you are mine?

 

the pain is sudden

Our bodies are one.

I'll love you forever

because this is my first time.

I'll love you forever,

Because you are mine.

 

You were Gentle.

You were kind,

I'm glad to say you are still are mine.

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and the repetition gave the story balance and reason. The poem flowed like a old melody from the past. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Jock Engelman]

i love the allusion to the knowledge of sex, and how it feels for one's "first time" and the emotions that fall from it.
I find this following set of lines to be extremely emotive:
"I'll love you forever
because this is my first time.
I'll love you forever,
Because you are mine."

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, this was very powerful. Got kinda teary-eyed, actually, heh. I've never ever had a 'first time' yet, but hopefully soon tho. Very beautiful words expressed here, I totally love it! And im very glad that things went ok, hehe :) Great piece!!

[Angelic Surrender]

So sweet and beautiful :)

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Lovely, and sweet. Even intense in some ways..

[5minutesofcrazy]

Awesome.

I wish I could find other words to describe this, but the power and the intensity are leaving me just a bit dry at the moment. A very good write, thank you.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Really quite nice expressing the feelings about The first Time... fitting title.

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very good poem about the first time ^_^
Only one error, you put the word "are" too many times in the last sentence.
"I'm glad to say you are still are mine."
See?

[maddie]

nice poem. reminds me of the song "white houses" by vanessa carlton.

[megan brooks]

it's wonderful