Ich Liebe Dich

Ich Liebe Dich

A Poem by SuicidePact.

He calls me his angel

I call him my bear.

 

He holds my hand

running my fingers through his hair,

 

I look him in the eye,

he's my cutie pie.

 

He's my protector,

his strength makes me feel safe.

 

Fall asleep in his arms,

he wakes up in mine

 

when we're apart,

he's always in my heart.

 

He's the king of all Huggers,

He makes my day great.

 

When he kisses me hello,

When I'm kissing him goodbye,

 

I will always love him,

he will always love I.

 

© 2012 SuicidePact.


Author's Note

SuicidePact.
# I know that "He will always love I" is grammatically incorrect, but I wanted it to rhyme with goodbye.

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A lovely write :))

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sometimes the simplest things say more. Nice write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lovely. I like this a lot. You did a great job! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


so nice and freely flowing poem :)
I like it, the way it sounds like a song!
thank you for sharing!
~nia ~

Posted 12 Years Ago


Awwwww...

this made me feel so good for some time!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Aw! This was so adorable and beautiful!
Sweet poem!
:)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


A very cute sense of playful affection to this one. Good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


The "I" had a good effect :) Good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very nice! Don't worry about the 'I' part. People grasp the rhyming scheme by the end of the poem anyways;D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Don't worry about the last line... you want to be creatively free (poetic license) in forging a unique style for yourself. Throwing off the reader on the last line is minor compared to somewhere in the middle of the poem... and the middle of this poem perfectly good. Think of a catchy line though, like "His heart belongs to me, myself, and I" This poem is well writen IMO (in my opinion). Thanks Ms. Pact :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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