Sydney Trip.

Rocking up at 5am, I see my classmates I see my friends.

Everyone tired, everyone excited.

Waiting, for this trip to finally begin.

We’ve waited our whole lives, waited for this day.

It’s the class of twenty twelve and it’s going to be the greatest.

We flew and we paddled, we shopped and we dropped,

We ventured all around the city, we ventured until we got lost.

We were sick, we were tired, and we didn’t know what to do.

Things got catty, things got too much to handle.

But in the end we survived, we’re now back in Brisbane,

And we can now all admit, Sydney Australia has impacted our lives.

Author's Note

I just got back from my year 12 trip to Sydney , it was amazing, even though I was born in Sydney I haven’t lived there since I was 5 so it was an amazing experience.

Reviews

[CHRIS ANDES]

what a great experience
=]

[Barbara Walker]

Well, this isn't so much a poem as a story. I would like to see the second to last line read, "We're now back in Brisbane, in the end, we survived". I just think it would help the flow a little. It's great that you had the trip and can recognize what the negatives were and why. Thank you for sharing!

[reflectingus]

I feel like going to Sydney too, now!
Haha, love the way you wrote it, pretty succinct, and yet, showing off that joy, with simple words blended in an honest way, recalling a great experience. I would have loved more details, but I guess that's just me being extra picky! well, congratulations on your graaduation, and that trip.

[Clare the Artist]

colorful and descriptive :D Me likey

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Wow, that sounds like a lot of fun :) great poem!!

[Who Cares]

You rshould write a part two, I want to know more. I liek it alot though. Nice work :D

[S. Michael Long]

i want to know more, this is a great write, i would say, however.. you use rhyme throughout the poem, but the rhyme drops off on the last 3 stanzas, this is ok if thats how you intended it (for the purpose of impact i mean) but i wish it still had the flow and rhyme of the stanzas before the last 3.. Nice work!

[Tabitha t]

the only thing I must critique here is that the line " things got too much to handle" doesnt quiet fit the temp for the rest of the poem. besides that it was great and im very jealous!

[Forest Green]

This trip of yours was a trip...your poem made me smile...such a mood of deja vue you have created. Try Manhattan, Montana where the burgers were hot and salty and the fries would scorch...such was my visit to the wilder climes when but a youth...:)

Thank you much for this poem, and sending it my way...!!!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very nice poem with personal story and feelings! thank u!
~nia~