What's going on inside me.

Don’t try my phone,

I just want to be left alone,

My mind feels so weak,

I don’t wish to speak,

Sadness fills my bones,

My heart, nobody owns.

I’m searching for my purpose,

Feeling forever worthless,

All I can do is cry,

I just really want to die.

Author's Note

I wrote from the heart, I wrote my current feelings :P

so far it's the only poem i have written this week that i thoought was any good..hope you like it.

Reviews

[dillonjensen]

This is really great because I'm certain more than one person can relate to what you have written. I myself feel lost in a world and am trying to find my purpose, whereas I think a good majority of people are. "Love is patient, love is kind." A lot of people get too hung up on love or the thought of being totally consumed emotionally and physically with another. The thing is, if you've been single for let's say four or five years, it might take more than a year or two to truly fall in love with someone; just be patient. I really hope you don't feel like dying, life is too precious to live in regret and contempt for past actions or feelings. Live for today, today, and worry about tomorrow, tomorrow.

[Cathy Wattam]

Really nicely written although I feel sad to think you are actually feeling this way. Just as it is possible with writing to put down your inner thoughts and feelings, it is also possible to imagine feeling really happy and express that in the form of poetry or verse.

You write very nicely, simply and with full on emotion. You are clearly intelligent and compassionate. Why not have a little compassion for yourself? Do we actually need a purpose in life? What if your purpose was to enlighten others in how to write great poetry? Great poetry won't just last during your life time but for the generations to follow. Surely that is a purpose?

Remember, when you are in the deepest, darkest pit of despair, somewhere there will be a glimmer of hope, a tiny shaft of light. Darkness cannot exist without light. You just have to find that light. I know you can find it. Blessings to you.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Your life is precious in the eyes of truth. You were strong enough to share your pain and you're strong enough to live another day. Good read and rhyme:)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i love this poem's smooth and simple flow

[mariah]

wow, very well expressed, and written. it flows very well, which helps keep the reader interested the whole time. nice work!
-mariah

[Secret Valentine]

I love this peice considering the fact that i can really relate to the words that ezxpress your feelings. I enjoyed it and I think others will too. Good work

[Sleeping Maiden]

Really expressive and i can relate so well...
Sometimes it just sucks so bad having to feel that. Life can really push us to our limit.. and sometimes it's hard to accept it..

I like the write. Relatable and honest. A masterpiece! Great job!

[?]

You have expressed your feelings well in this piece...So many others feel this way..even I can relate a little
Nicely done

[Pencrafter]

A very descriptive poem with strong emotion. I congratulate you on a well-written piece. You have good spelling and grammar along with simple, clear statements in each line. It reads smoothly and is easily understood. When I feel like that I lie down and retreat to my 'happy place' of imagination. There I can be relaxing on a grassy hill under a shade tree, watching and listening to nature. Good poem!

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Good poem, but I don't like to think of you feeling this way. Things change, just wait for it.