A Poem by Jake Staffeld

The gun goes off
The alarm clock sounds
Sprinting for the finish line
Getting up for another day

Run as fast as you can
Stumbling down the hall
Passing the other racers
Passing things you would rather not see

Round the last corner
Enter this last door
100 meters left
100 seconds left

© 2011 Jake Staffeld

Author's Note

Jake Staffeld
Since only half the people seem to get it, one is succeeding, one is killing themselves.

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A little short, but very good. I agree with the other readers, some extra description would be nice.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow. Just, wow.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Very dark and depressing.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I'm not sure if I understand what's happening in this poem. It sounds good though. It's a little vague.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Great write! I do though, feel like something is missing, whether it be an explanation or maybe a bit more "mood words" or emotion. It is well done, however. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on April 4, 2011
Last Updated on April 5, 2011


Jake Staffeld
Jake Staffeld

Bend, OR

I'm in college, whoooooo. I like all kinds of rock, and songwriting. That's how I got into Poems in the first place. Some of these will actually be songs of mine I've modified. more..


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