Impacts

A song that I modified.

I'll see

If my mistakes

Have repercussions

Soon

 

We'll see

If your actions

Have repercutions

Soon

 

These choices we make

Seem so permanent at the time

Even when they're not

But they'll always

Come back and bite us

 

Mistakes compiled

Building on each other

Adding up to more

Than the sum of it's parts

 

Actions joined

Crashing down all around

Detracting from the origin

Lessening the impact

 

Nothing else seems to matter

But our mistakes and our actions

Now that random fate is less important

Than it ever was before

Author's Note

This one kind of sucks, I know. I'm not too proud of it, unfortunatley.

Reviews

[Awkward]

"Mistakes compiled
Building on each other
Adding up to more
Than the sum of it's parts"

I guess this is life right? Very nice topic to write about, you really captured me!

[pete Diaz]

.Well captured, it is easy to relate because of its vagueness, not that what you are saying isn't clear but rather it is the shades & hughes which become personal definition

[Coyote Poetry]

"Even when they're not
But they'll always
Come back and bite us"
I believe in the words stated above. We will pay for the good and bad we do in a life sooner or later. There is a lot of logic in the poem. I learn to complain less and nothing good to say. Say nothing. A wise man stand for the right things. Even if they put him in harms way. A outstanding poem. You made me think.
Coyote

[Althelia Marie Caine]

So depressing, Jake!!!! good write tho