So it is

So it is

A Poem by Jake Staffeld

Trusted
Revered
Loved
Before then
Prior
To your
Indiscretion

So it is
That you
Take us down
We topple
In shock and awe

Warfare seems almost easier
Than befriending
People like you

So it is
Your allies fall
To the knives
In our backs

I guess
The world won
With your support

So it is
I find myself
Betrayed

Why have enemies?
You cover my need
To be destroyed
And you do it
With the warmth
Of a friendly embrace

So it is
I collapse
Laying on the bloody ground
Where you left me

© 2011 Jake Staffeld


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I loved how you wrote the stanzas!! It gave this piece a different type of flow... I have been reading a lot of poems this evening but this one really stood out to me with it's uniqueness :) Loved!

~Erinne

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very, very, very good. this should be published somewhere.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent...xx

Posted 11 Years Ago


"So it is
Your allies fall
To the knives
In our backs"
This was by far my favorite part in this piece :D....you phrased this ingeniously!
This was such a tale told in such polished words the reader cannot help but be drawn in by the quality of the phrasing :)

This was a very thoughtful piece.

Nicely done.

~M.Babu~

Posted 11 Years Ago


A amazing story in this poem. The description made the scene come alive. Sometime when the battle is lost. Good to lay down in the blood and learn the lesson well and get up stronger and wiser. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


This was amazing. The ending was superb.
♥ Ta'Shandra

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Jake Staffeld
Jake Staffeld

Bend, OR



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I'm in college, whoooooo. I like all kinds of rock, and songwriting. That's how I got into Poems in the first place. Some of these will actually be songs of mine I've modified. more..

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