Until the end

Young and in love
We swore to stay
Tight as doves
As fate held sway
Until the end

Older and struggling
Holding on even so
Let hardship sing
Before I let go
To the end

Coming back from
The fire there
Why don't you come
To me here
At the end

We swore to hold on
Through anything and everything
Why then are we gone
Dropped that ring
Let go of until the end

Reviews

[M.Babu]

The last stanza is so final and moving...how the things we find ourselves promising sometimes turn to ash...i think that is the nature of the world...

Valiant effort :D
~M.Babu~

[Coyote Poetry]

Promise seem far away sometime. A very good poem. Some question have no answers. The emotion of love and need fade away. Leaving us with sadness and question. I like the complete poem. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bryan Micheni]

nice write... very good idea.

[Kiri Nells]

Nice! I can tell you're putting effort into your pieces! What would make things even better is trying to let go of that control, let your muse write for you! Your work will turn into absolute art! Try it out and RR me, I want to know how it goes for you!