Wobbly Wheel

Silly Poem from our blog. Jakedogstories.blogspot.com

My bike has a wobbly wheel.

It happened racing down a hill.

I hit a rock and flew up higher,

Than advised for my front tire.

Now when I ride I waver and weave.

I've had to add time to when I leave.

I used to ride straight, south to north,

But now I have to go back and forth.

Reviews

[Ees]

Another charming poem that you have here! The last two stanzas are fantastic. I can picture some kids giggling over this!

In the first stanza, I do not love the rhyme of wheel/hill. You may want to think about some rephrasing.

"Than advised for my front tire."- This doesn't seem to make sense and I don't feel like it flows with all the other imagery in the poem anyway.

Other than those two little comments, fantastic poem!
Great job,
Have fun,
Erin

[Ees]

Another charming poem that you have here! The last two stanzas are fantastic. I can picture some kids giggling over this!

In the first stanza, I do not love the rhyme of wheel/hill. You may want to think about some rephrasing.

"Than advised for my front tire."- This doesn't seem to make sense and I don't feel like it flows with all the other imagery in the poem anyway.

Other than those two little comments, fantastic poem!
Great job,
Have fun,
Erin

[Craba]

wonderful fun read. very poetic