A Cold Hand Like That Of A Corpse

A Cold Hand Like That Of A Corpse


Cold hand, when clutched
Lay limp
Rugged remorselessness,
Braced together with the
Liveliness of mine
Not even a shudder, a twinkling
That spoke to me of blood flowing through these veins
The disdain that I feel for you just now,
Like holding hands with a corpse-
Which might be warmer still
Than this death-clasp which I take part in,
A glimpse of your thoughts; most likely:
Don't touch my hand,
Your hand repulses mine
I give it to you though,
Dead as you are to me-
Feel as I turn the temperature to amphibious-like degrees
Fine, let go as I take solace in knowing
The last time your good hands touch mine
As they used to crawl every inch of me...when pleasure spoke
Letting go...puzzled, I knew
Only a hand from a heartless intent could feel so icy.

Reviews

[Dani California]

This is fascinating!
I have not seen this experience
(and I've had it)
put into words before.
Incredible..you pulled it off perfectly!
This is it exactly! Wow!!

"Don't touch my hand,
Your hand repulses mine
I give it to you though,
Dead as you are to me-
Feel as I turn the temperature to amphibious-like degrees
Fine, let go-as I take solace in knowing
The last time your good hands touch mine
As they used to crawl every inch of me-when pleasure spoke
Letting go-puzzled, I knew
Only a hand from a heartless intent could feel so icy."


Very impressive! You've managed to capture not only
the thoughts, but the emotions.. spot on. And all
with awesome flow...

Take a bow my friend! :)

[Freedom]

well i can definitely relate to this..beautifully written.

[emz]

very well written... no words need to be spoken when one person falls out of love with the other... you just know.. i think you portrayed the feeling very well.

well done

x

[Pointblank]

Oh Boy. I can relate to this one. U explain so well the feeling of love lost. When the feelings are gone even without saying it...u just feel it. very well done.