Best Friend

Best Friend

A Poem by James Watts
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Short poem. I am still winging the poetry thing. For the poetry police, I am new to this, so go easy.

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All my life I have wished for someone like you
A best friend to share in everything I do
You are the one that makes me smile
Even if it is only every once and awhile
You make life so much more
Hanging with you is never a bore
I wish that I could be what you wanted
But in that I will always feel daunted
You are where my heart belongs
You are the one that makes me feel strong
You are my best friend
You, I pray, will be there with me until the end

© 2018 James Watts


Author's Note

James Watts
Another random piece. But I am feeling better now. I hope that my skills improve and any advice I do appreciate. Feels weird not telling a story, but telling a story.

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Excellent stuff! I enjoyed the rhyme, n' the emotions felt real, not forced or phony! ㋡

Posted 10 Years Ago


its good for a start..
its a fun piece to read..
but i guess, as u get better, u will write more deeply..
but, this is a good tribute to a frnd!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Relax as you write, and it will get better, I promise.

Posted 10 Years Ago


A good thing to remember is this: poetry does not have to rhyme. If it feels forced to us, as readers, perhaps it's not what you really wanted to say. It is definitely a good start, but I'd try reworking this without a rhyme scheme. See if it turns out smoother. Otherwise, not a terrible piece. (Trying to avoid subject matter for now). Anyway, I also like how you aligned your poem to the left, if only because I rarely see people do that.

Posted 10 Years Ago


nice poem...it's so true that we all want a best friend and when we have one we wish that we never loose that person....the alignment is also good

Posted 10 Years Ago


I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, love this!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very sweet. A great flow, but the rhyming feels a bit forced. Altogether, I liked it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


hahahaha poetry police. i love the sentiment in this piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like this. The fact that it doesn't tell too much of a story is good, because it makes it easier to relate to.

The line "Hanging with you is never a bore" was described as childish by another reviewer. I probably wouldn't have put it in myself, but only because it's not the sort of phrase I would use. In the context of the poem however, the informal nature of this comment suggests that you are relaxed in the relationship, and while you may want more, there is a certain amount of comfort obtained from the status quo. For me, that sets the tone for the rest of the poem.

Very good overall.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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James Watts
James Watts

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