Save the Broken Pieces for Me

Save the Broken Pieces for Me

A Poem by James

I took a swing at a fine crystal vase
with a cracked bat
It didn't break
but the bat did
it shattered like a window tossed from a two story building
slivers of hickory wood like shards of glass
covered the floors 
so you couldn't walk without feeling my pain

I tried to sweep them with a broom
and I heard you say
save the broken pieces for me.

© 2020 James


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The opening comes across like a face slap -- the juxtaposition of what broke & what didn't -- reminds me of how those who go around beating up on people as their answer to fixing issues may think they're enjoying a moment of power & victory, but in the end, they lose. The image painted in the last 3 lines of V1 is spectacular writing, that final line slays! I also like the 3-line ending, but that finish of V1 is so powerful, that's the climax of this poem for me (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

1 Year Ago

Thanks, I love your view of this poem. I was really just messing around and feeling a little bit do.. read more



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The opening comes across like a face slap -- the juxtaposition of what broke & what didn't -- reminds me of how those who go around beating up on people as their answer to fixing issues may think they're enjoying a moment of power & victory, but in the end, they lose. The image painted in the last 3 lines of V1 is spectacular writing, that final line slays! I also like the 3-line ending, but that finish of V1 is so powerful, that's the climax of this poem for me (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

1 Year Ago

Thanks, I love your view of this poem. I was really just messing around and feeling a little bit do.. read more
Possibly I am over interpreting so I'll say, I like it.
And how true so often we sweep up and dispose of broken things rather than try to mend.
Good stuff.

Posted 1 Year Ago


this window into a relationship expresses the angst two people are feeling towards each other.
It becomes semi-violent...as they try to exorcise the demons in their relationship.
and then...as he decides to sweep up the mess he has made with his temper, they reach a sort of accord, a common ground as she lets him know that she is broken as well.
wonderful metaphor here.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago



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