A Blur...

A Blur...

A Poem by Jamestown
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Longing for Love...

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A Blur...

Today is not my best day
I want the ache in my heart to go away,

I completely long to be strong in love again
I feel my thoughts of my lady just blowing in
the wind,

I can visualize her
I can smell her
I can almost feel her

My vision and emotions are so clear
then a moment later they just disappear, (a blur)

I am confused why my love must be detoured
I am becoming frustrated and it's quite absurd,

She awaits me as I for her finding my lady is a game
of cat and mouse, I game I am getting tired of playing
but if it means capturing the love of my life I will continue
waiting,

I know I must be patient but today my patients are at wit's
end and I so badly want my new life of love to begin,

Some men and women think it's okay to have 2 or 3
but I just want 1 to love have and hold just her and me,

Oh well, when the timing is right everything will fall in it's place
but for now I'll just pace, Lord I know that I'm a disgrace
but if you send me my lady, I promise to win life's race

I can visualize her
I can smell her
I can almost feel her

I beg of you Lord, please let her not be just a blur
I want her, I need her, that is for sure...

© 2015 Jamestown


Author's Note

Jamestown
God is good!
I must be patient and humble:)
Hope you enjoy...

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The romantic longing in the poem is intense. Well written, James. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jamestown

7 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Nicely written my friend. And may the Lord send that special lady into your life very soon. ~Sharon

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jamestown

7 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Miss Sharon

7 Years Ago

You are so welcome my friend! ~SP
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So sweet
Wishing she wont be a blur

love this alot

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
This is a beautiful piece:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and your kind review, b-blessed!
Great write. Shows your beautiful heart :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and your kind review, b-blessed!
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613
I believe you're missing the word "my" here: "Today is not my best day I want the ache in (MY) heart to go away,"; also, there are a few grammatical errors.

But overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Very nice job.

- Brittney

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and your helpful hints, I appreciate it b-blessed to
613

8 Years Ago

Sure thing! I look forward to reading more from you. (& thank you again!)
As the saying goes "Great things come to those who wait" God hears and listen and His timing is always perfect :) beautiful poem

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

True,thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
I hope that you can find this "God" easier than I.
I enjoyed this poem. I, TOO... would love to feel the arms of love envelope me.
Keep up the good work.
Kevin

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

All in due time:) Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Darkevin

8 Years Ago

Try my "hey God... gotta minute!"
Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Sure just message me.
It's the worst feeling in the world...waiting for anything. Especially a woman. You captured that perfectly in this writing. Great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Wow. Great sentiments that touch a chord with me. It is amazing how for just a moment we can almost touch a person in our thoughts ... and then, just like that, they are gone. An excellent write. ~Jim

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jamestown

8 Years Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

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Added on April 6, 2015
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