Intelligence and Depression

He has a spark in his eye.
The spark contains
intelligence, loneliness, Empathy, hatred, and hope.
He sits alone, his long brown hair covers half his face.
He dreams of having someone by his side, someone like him.
He hides in his mind and gets lost in there.
With a heart like his every event impacts your sanity.
You love people, but at the same time you despise them.
You end up hating how you think as well as hating how they think.
You become consumed by loneliness and hatred but
the empathy also remains intact.
You end up drowning yourself in whatever substance makes you forget everything.
If you're one of the lucky ones,
you drown yourself in love...

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The format in one paragraph --- I believe would work better broken down...and feel the depth of this work...you convey the emotions to the reader...yet the read is fast-paced...as I said to grasp the intent --- of the reader more... edit this down and make it speak its brevity...as is --- you still give that aspect --- but not with the punching power:

He has a spark in his eye...
The spark contains:
intelligence, loneliness, empathy,
hatred, and hope.
He sits alone,
his long brown hair covers half his face.
He dreams of having someone by his side,
someone like him.
He hides in his mind and gets lost in there.
With a heart like his every event
impacts your sanity.
You love people,
but at the same time you despise them.
You end up hating how you think,
as well as hating how they think.
You become consumed by loneliness and hatred,
but the empathy also remains intact.
You end up drowning yourself in whatever substance,
makes you forget everything.
If you're one of the lucky ones,
you drown yourself in love...

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See what I mean --- about the structure of your lines...now --- it speaks out and grabs attention...but it's just my observation --- you decide the final verdict of your work...

[Jamie Starlight]

Thanks, I see what you mean.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...