10 words

10 words

A Poem by JanieB
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Stipulated 10 words to be used in no more than 40 word poem.

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10 words

 

Looking out from my huge empire

The season changing

Rain is falling

Upon the dead, yellow moss

 

Snow Covering the frozen lake

Mist rolling over the valley beyond

Oh what a sight, now I feel such a fake

What empire?

© 2010 JanieB


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*********************************************************** challenges *****************************
11 words

rolling yellow moss
covering dead fake
empire rains
in lake season.

It was a challenge, but I tried to make at least a stanza on the words given. Couldn't and added [in] & one [s]. It really makes no sense, as sometimes poetry doesn't appear to right away. Even less sometimes in free form Prose. I enjoyed the trying and really enjoyed your well written poem. I think I'll try within the 40 the make a recognizable pretext... Thanks for making me smile.

******************************************************************************* today *************** ;)
Write On / Right On! Romon in Review. Peace

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A great poem! Love the way you represent empire in this poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Pretty good imagery. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Looks good, sounds good, therefore it is good, I shall give it ten lol

Posted 8 Years Ago


Oh this is great! I loved the images here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


one word, Nice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


well done :)

Peace
Robin

Posted 8 Years Ago


The imagery is great! the poem is beautiful!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow. I like the idea of constrained word poems and you did a great job managing/ restraining yourself there. And the last line was BINGO for me. Good Job..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is absolutely excellent! Clap!, Clap!, Clap! I really enjoyed this one.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You did well with the challenge

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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JanieB
JanieB

Paphos, Europe, Cyprus



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I started writing in October '10. A real new bee to this world of writing. I currently live in Cyprus, where I have been since 2005. I am British, and have spent many years living abroad. Please j.. more..

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