Uncertain holiday

Uncertain holiday

A Poem by JanieB

Where are we going..it's so exciting!


Uncertain holiday


Butterflies in my stomach

Just booked the tickets

Oh how exciting

Off to Spain we go!


Viva Espana! Here we come

Bathing suits are out

Suntan cream packed

Don’t forget the passports.


We’re off to the airport

Taxi hurtling at a speed of knots

Passing the neighbours along the way

Waving “adios”, see you soon..


Fasten your seatbelts they announce

Gin and tonic in hand

Oh how we love our holidays

The sun, sea and sand.


Off we go high into the sky

Boats and people below like little ants

High above the clouds we fly

See you all soon..bye!


The last minute deal

Never knowing your destination

Oh the thrill of it all

The sheer excitement.


Landing now

Off we go, to where we don’t know

Onto the coach with others like us

All smiles and in trepidation.


A journey that seems to take forever

At last we’re here

Oh no..not this hotel

Looks like Fawlty Towers.


In we go like little sheep

Awaiting allocation of our room

In we go, we have to laugh

What a dump, yet again.


Never mind we have to say

Mustn’t grumble as Terry Wogan says

Only here for a fortnight

It’ll be alright..


© 2010 JanieB

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I love your enthusiasm in this piece. :) It's great. Good write!

Posted 11 Years Ago

LOL I remember getting all excited as a child just going to wales on holiday, now even though I travel to far more exotic destinations, that excitement never comes, sigh oh for lost youth, enjoyed the trip back down memory lane

Posted 11 Years Ago

This is great! Either way, at least it's still a break from the normal routine. :3

Posted 11 Years Ago

it be like that sometimes. got to go with the flow. I do like how this came together. nice work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Hahahahaha! Always trip like that happening to someone! Good write!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Yeah, I jumped in the luggage on this way. Your brain thinks in poem. This could have easily been a story that you made into a poem.

Would fit into a family album perfectly

Posted 11 Years Ago

I liked this style, I felt i was on the trip too!

Posted 11 Years Ago

a little more description? :) overall i'd say its alright but it needs a bit of moulding. its not as good as some of your work that ive read :) x

Posted 11 Years Ago

Nice I like the ending and a little spelling incorrection but overall nice work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I would agree with Sarah, it's got good bones, but try to make it a little more poetic, as opposed to just stops along the way...

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on November 3, 2010
Last Updated on November 3, 2010



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