You opened up my life

You opened up my life

A Poem by JanieB

You opened up my life

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You opened up my world

My world full of despair

You took me to a place

A place where I felt free

 

Free from a life of destruction

Free from a life of pain

Free from a life of misery

To a place full of hope and happiness

 

How amazing those feelings were

Happiness like I’ve never felt

Caring that I’d never had

Love unimaginable

 

But now it has gone again

Back to being unhappy

Feeling worthless and in pain

Back to a life of misery

 

If only we hadn’t met

Then I wouldn’t know these feelings

Feelings I will never forget

Feelings I wish would return.

© 2011 JanieB


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I have felt this having love a love you believe to be unbreakable and then hurt beyond belief when you realize just how easy it all can fall apart and then wishing you had never felt that way at all! Great write truly relate able

Posted 12 Years Ago


a damsel in distress finds their hero, the feelings went from zero and numb to an unlimited amount of joy and life, with every sense turned on; i know this feeling - beautiful and sad...

Posted 13 Years Ago


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that's why it's important to find happiness on oneself..relying on others to find it..will not bring happiness..nicely conveyed

Posted 13 Years Ago


Tragic-But a beautiful tragedy. Beautifully juxtaposed into a lovely slew of words. I salute u!

Posted 13 Years Ago


very good version of the classic tragic love poem good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is true love!

Posted 13 Years Ago


it's a good old sad love poem. you could put more powerful imagery to it or add more intense words to avoid making cliches. this is a good poem but i believe that there's still room for improvement. go for it!..is all :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


What is truly unique when it comes to writing a poem or story about love is how close to the heart it is to the author. There is just something really absorbing about the way in which you can describe these feelings which creates such a strong sense of sympathy for the reader, that they'll want to keep coming back and re-read your poems. To lose something as dearly as love, it is a ver painful and emotional experience. Thank you for sharing this

Posted 13 Years Ago


A lovers lament for lost love, filled with a deep longing for that which has past through, leaving a great sadness a heartache so hard to bare and nothing left to share

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is beautiful

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on March 20, 2011
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JanieB
JanieB

Paphos, Europe, Cyprus



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I started writing in October '10. A real new bee to this world of writing. I currently live in Cyprus, where I have been since 2005. I am British, and have spent many years living abroad. Please j.. more..

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