I just want to be alone

I just want to be alone

A Poem by JanieB

I just want to be alone

As the sun shone on the golden sand

The long boats sailed in laden with fish

Children played in the shallow waters

I looked out, but just wanted to be alone.

 

The sun set in the distance

Redness lit up the sky

The reflection shone on the ocean

I gazed out at the amazing colours before me, but I just wanted to be alone.

 

The fishermen pulled in their fruitful catch

Smiles upon their handsome faces

The children shouted to their Fathers with glee

Happiness surrounded me, but I just wanted to be alone.

 

As I stood up and looked around me

I felt my heart sink with sadness

The tears rolled down my face

I just wanted to be alone.

© 2012 JanieB


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Something is missing... not from the poem really, but the wanting to be alone when all this good is happening means that something else is the matter.

Like the children being happy to see their fathers and maybe your father is not around... don't know I can't quite see it but there is something unsaid and there are questions unanswered and I want to know more... so you did well.. I like it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


wow... beautiful picture and an amazing ending, love it so much :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is true for me, I often cry at happy things and just want to go home... Wonderful poem, excellent imagery.

Posted 11 Years Ago


i love this one! I think its my favorite one from you, yet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Felt the plea of wanting to be alone, felt the emotion.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow. "I just wanted to be alone". It was a one good sentence to be repetitive.

Posted 11 Years Ago


nice :) i just wanted to be alone was a nice repetitive phase :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


There are times when you get the prefect set and this sound like one of them love how it comes together. Nice work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


the first 3 stanzas, i didn't perceive as wanting to be alone as sadness until the last stanza; i wondered what this heart was hiding...

Posted 11 Years Ago



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JanieB
JanieB

Paphos, Europe, Cyprus



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I started writing in October '10. A real new bee to this world of writing. I currently live in Cyprus, where I have been since 2005. I am British, and have spent many years living abroad. Please j.. more..

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