Little Old Man

Little Old Man

A Poem by J.R Schlievert
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Little old man 
 
Your dissolved in your own bitterness 
Cant love 
Cant feel 
Push others away  
 
Little old man 
 
You think you’ve seen everything 
grazed every aspect of life and death 
Life is a donation, you say 
But death is a delay  
 
Little old man 
 
The ebony hat you wear 
And the cold wooden bench you sit on 
A so-called Raven perched on your shoulder 
But all I see is a Swallow, alighting on you 
 
Little old man 
 
dangling from a rope 
In a befoul, shallow, hotel 
First person to see him was an old maid doing her daily rounds 
And the last person to see him was a 23 year old clerk  
 
Little old man 
 
So quiescent in the black coffin 
A priest, holding a book that the old man loathed with definite ambition  
And he read out of it 
Gods little joke, last thing you will hear is my words 
 
Little old man………. 
No more 
 

© 2009 J.R Schlievert


Author's Note

J.R Schlievert
just for fun :) say/ do whatever

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This really encapsulates what some of the elderly go through
when life's thrown them a curved ball. The first three verses
superbly sets the mood & tone of a life, forlorn ... Very moving...
Lots of imagery... An a touch of humor in the end keeps
LOM from being a complete bumper, man .....
Excellent work!
LeeLee

Posted 9 Years Ago


Did you write this about my ex? If so I love the ending!!!


Posted 9 Years Ago


Strangely enough, I like this! (And that isn't meant as an insult; I just usually don't like the idea of old people dying off, haha).

It does bother me how some elderly people think that the world owes them something; perhaps I am very immature for saying so, but it doesn't seem like anyone has that right. I definately respect the elderly, and understand that they tend to have alot more life experience/wisdom, but I really can't imagine myself being bitter and resentful like some elderly folks I know.

That said, I really like the part about "God's little joke;" ironic, no? Great poem, very entertaining :)


Posted 9 Years Ago


ITS REALLY GOOD !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i like it :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dude... you killed the old man. (in the poem. since you made him die... haha?) *shakes head* What did he do to you? Nawn. It was nice, a distraction. So... I can do whatever? *dances around room like a crazy*

It was enjoyable. not the happiest of happiest of things (you did kill the guy) but still, it wasn't depressing either. At least... not to me, and therefore, I label it as enjoyable.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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