Parasite Fetish
A Poem by
J.R Schlievert
Another Classic By J.R Schlievert
I hope hahah
She creeps around without sound
She listens carefully
Not a sound, not a word
Shes home ward bound
The love of her life
Till death does she part
In this case she did
Motivated by strife
Don’t wake the children
For gods sake
Home ward bound
The note once written
Don’t bother cleaning up
It was a mess already
It will be handled
Note under the coffee cup
Shes a talented sneaker
Her feet approaching the door
Don’t wake the kids for gods sake
Laughing all the way to the bank
All the men she has met were selfish
Crude and rude
One thing in common
They all had a parasite fetish
© 2010 J.R Schlievert
Author's Note
Tell me what you honestly think, i want to get better :) learn from my mistakes
Reviews
I really like the last two stanza's It tells me so much about the poem.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Very good, I really like this. I can't really say anythign about it though, otherwise it would seem like I just stole SilentVerses review XP but this is amazing still (:
Posted 13 Years Ago
Very good, I really like this. I can't really say anythign about it though, otherwise it would seem like I just stole SilentVerses review XP but this is amazing still (:
Beautifully descriptive, sneaky and sensual in its delicate tone, joyous temptation between the lines of serious connotations, I like it.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Beautifully descriptive, sneaky and sensual in its delicate tone, joyous temptation between the lines of serious connotations, I like it.
You never cease to amaze me love. =D
Posted 13 Years Ago
You never cease to amaze me love. =D
Well, I can truly appreciate this in ways I can't even explain. This is well written and the point was made very clearly. I enjoyed the way it was written, and the inclusion of the children, naturally. It had a personal, distant bitterness that gave it a bit of a flair. Very well done and quite enjoyable.
Luna
Posted 13 Years Ago
Well, I can truly appreciate this in ways I can't even explain. This is well written and the point was made very clearly. I enjoyed the way it was written, and the inclusion of the children, naturally. It had a personal, distant bitterness that gave it a bit of a flair. Very well done and quite enjoyable.
Luna
Wow, I loved the use of irony in this!
Good work here, it was vey enjoyable.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Wow, I loved the use of irony in this!
Good work here, it was vey enjoyable.
i like this
Posted 13 Years Ago
i like this
This was good, kind of hard to keep up with, and the rhyme scheme was jumpy, but it was a good! Good job!
Posted 13 Years Ago
This was good, kind of hard to keep up with, and the rhyme scheme was jumpy, but it was a good! Good job!
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Added on November 27, 2010
Last Updated on November 27, 2010
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J.R Schlievert Queen Creak, AZ
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If a fun loving person! Need help with anything just give me a message and I promise that I will get to you! Im a big guy at 65 (AAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!! THAT RHYMED!) and I love people! And what ever they ..
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