Tin Man

Tin Man

A Poem by Jasmin

 I want, I need

I wish, I plead

I cry, I hurt 

I break, i leak

but you don't care

your my Tin Man

Cold, and heartless

© 2009 Jasmin


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Straight to the point, but with alot of feeling and and emotion that everyone can identify with. I liked it, it had an emotional lilt with a sharp knife point for an ending. Good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is a good write. Its short and to the point, but has great emotion in it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Lovely, and painful. Keep writing! ^-^

(Also, wrong "your". You want "you're" as in "you are", not the possessive version.)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very well penned!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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