A Poem by JayG

A romantic lament



Among the crowd, it’s you I see
You own my heart, you hold the key
My vision dark except for you
I see no room, no other view
You steal my sense,

my eyes both blind
Except for you
You fill my mind

You move with grace, the tiger's stalk
(my throat so dry I scarce can talk)
The piercing eye, the thrust of breast
(my heart is tearing in my chest)
In pain I gaze at hip and thigh
Who holds your love
Not I
Not I

Not for me those hidden graces
Not for me those secret places
Not for me love's lip on lip
And not for me caress of hip
No love for me, not even rind
Except for you
You fill

my mind

How came I thus to my sad fate?
To lose the one I need for mate
So many others more than I
Will please your sight, will catch your eye
I grope for words to bid you stay
To reach your heart, to find the way
But words still fail to pierce the veil
With silent tears, again I fail

You stand while I, with hope forlorn
Must curse the day that I was born
I need your mind, your scent, your touch
(the day we met I knew that much)
I know my fate is linked to you
(but how to make you see that, too?)

I watch you standing clothed in night
With eyes of mist and teeth so white
You touch my hand with skin of silk
The curve of breast, oh love's sweet milk
Tear from my lips the words to bind
(before, Dear God, I lose my mind)

You turn to me, all grace and fire
My flame of love, my blazing bier
You touch my cheek.... Will waiting end?
You smile and say, "Good night my friend."

I stand and weep, my hopes unwind
Except for you
You fill
My mind


© 2019 JayG

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This poem was the fundamental definition of a poem. Well crafted with perfect ordinance. Every passing line topped the one before it. Great poetry.

Posted 1 Day Ago

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Wow, I wish someone saw me that way, nice!!

Posted 2 Days Ago

Very well written. Well Done.

Posted 3 Days Ago

Perfect meter. Rare is it to find such craft today. 100/100

Posted 3 Days Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed your poem.And i actually related.

Posted 4 Days Ago

love your rhyme scheme here and i can truly feel your pain. almost despondency. great poem

Posted 2 Weeks Ago

There's more than rhythm here, something in the sync, the harmony, between every word and every line too, all through the composition, this is a fine fine piece of work. Fulfilling.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago

Love how the words were arranged and used. I also feel sadness and dejection. Good work.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago

This is a great poem. It has strong imagery. I really enjoyed reading it.

Keith Edward Baucum

Posted 3 Weeks Ago

Great poem, bro.
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