A Poem by JayG

A romantic lament



Among the crowd, it’s you I see
You own my heart, you hold the key
My vision dark except for you
I see no room, no other view
You steal my sense,

my eyes both blind
Except for you
You fill my mind

You move with grace, the tiger's stalk
(my throat so dry I scarce can talk)
The piercing eye, the thrust of breast
(my heart is tearing in my chest)
In pain I gaze at hip and thigh
Who holds your love
Not I
Not I

Not for me those hidden graces
Not for me those secret places
Not for me love's lip on lip
And not for me caress of hip
No love for me, not even rind
Except for you
You fill

my mind

How came I thus to my sad fate?
To lose the one I need for mate
So many others more than I
Will please your sight, will catch your eye
I grope for words to bid you stay
To reach your heart, to find the way
But words still fail to pierce the veil
With silent tears, again I fail

You stand while I, with hope forlorn
Must curse the day that I was born
I need your mind, your scent, your touch
(the day we met I knew that much)
I know my fate is linked to you
(but how to make you see that, too?)

I watch you standing clothed in night
With eyes of mist and teeth so white
You touch my hand with skin of silk
The curve of breast, oh love's sweet milk
Tear from my lips the words to bind
(before, Dear God, I lose my mind)

You turn to me, all grace and fire
My flame of love, my blazing bier
You touch my cheek.... Will waiting end?
You smile and say, "Good night my friend."

I stand and weep, my hopes unwind
Except for you
You fill
My mind


© 2019 JayG

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Very vivid and beautiful flow, enjoyed reading this.

Posted 15 Hours Ago

This literally gave me chills!

He longs to feel her touch but it's almost as if she sees right past him.
Thought of as his reason to breath- his world- unknowingly , she holds the key.
If only she could see.

"Goodnight my friend"
I felt his heart feeling hopeless with those 3 words- his cries seem to go unheard by her.
Edge of insanity.
Why can't it be him she sees?


Posted 2 Weeks Ago

That's was such a sweet and beautiful piece. It flows smoothly and rhymes roll on my tongue. I was smiling throughout.. Thinking about the pleasure to be loved like this but the ache to be a distant lover made it a bit wry

Posted 3 Weeks Ago

Very well written! You have a way with words! I was right there with ya til the end.

Posted 2 Months Ago

I love this write, This is so good

Posted 3 Months Ago

I like the melodic pace; how it flows seamlessly from a sweet love poem in the first stanza; to a tortured longing poem. Well written take on being friend zoned

Posted 5 Months Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful poem. I loved it.

Posted 5 Months Ago

This is how I feel about my boyfriend of course but how can I tell him so in such a singsongy way. I don't know how he would react to it and I want to write something seductive such that maybe he would want me to have a child with him. I wonder what your life is like, and who you were writing to and what that person is like, and how they feel about your poem also.

Posted 5 Months Ago


5 Months Ago

It wasn't written for someone. My poems are no more my life than are my fiction. Mostly, they're an .. read more
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5 Months Ago

oh, nice, yes, hopefully it had a happy ending
Very kindred poem and quite a soft spoken poem. It's funny how you can pass people and wish to create a lifetime with them.

Posted 6 Months Ago

Wow definitely one of the best poems I’ve read about unrequited love.. flows beautifully with brilliant imagery.

Posted 6 Months Ago

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Added on May 17, 2019
Last Updated on May 17, 2019



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