Headstrong Lover

Headstrong Lover

A Poem by JayceeC
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Septet II form--Carpe Diem

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Do Not Turn
Away from me now
When love is new and thrilling.
Nevermore, passion's flame flares untamed--
Hearts blindly lead the willing
Journey--unsurpassed.
CAUTION burns!

© 2015 JayceeC


Author's Note

JayceeC
This is a current contest piece written for another site in Spetet II form which basically is an English form consisting of a 7 line write that follows the syllable pattern of 3-5-7-9-7-5-3. No rhyme scheme is necessary.

This is just a passing nod to some of my faves John Donne, Christopher Marlowe, Robert Herrick and Robert Browning..they did passion well.

Now you know the rules, you can try it on your own.

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There is no greater burning than the fire of passion - the unrestricted desire that, once unleashed, is difficult to control... this piece fits the title very, very well and those opening lines - with their demanding tone - clearly let the reader know that this is not some dilly-dallying crush in need of a quick fix; no, this is something that is far more explosive...

I love the play on 'blind leading the willing' - it's tough being the willing and having to watch as the blind lover bumbles about, not really understanding the desires of want... those burning needs...

...and yes, passion is, indeed, an unsurpassed journey that requires a cautionary sign...

I really felt the heat in this one, Jan, as well as the chill... and, I love the form.

Well-done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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8 Years Ago

You are kindly welcome, Jan, and I never expect anything - I always read what is there and it is the.. read more
JayceeC

8 Years Ago

HMMM Interesting--Your objectivity indicates that I'm not always recognizing all the elements I'm pu.. read more
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8 Years Ago

Yes, on the last comment...



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Well penned!
The coals are definitely at an all time high temperature
when that new lustful inferno takes over the mood in the
beginning, I think we all will be able to agree on this point:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the read James. I now owe you a few.
Hahah you really amazed me....very nice!

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Thanks Sky! :-)
Writer at last! Sky ~

8 Years Ago

Welcome friend!
Thx for the explanation about the form. Lovely poem about a subject most know very well, being the sentient creatures we are. I wonder if the reasoning would be enhanced by a comma between caution and burns? As written I take the meaning to be that caution is the problem, that the caution actually burns (as to burn). I think your meaning may be the traditional use of "caution" in the sense of "watch out , you might get burned. Or would it work better to say caution, fire? As always, you know what you're dealing with with me--an insensitive lout when it comes to poetry, so feel free to sock me in the eye and move on!

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Actually I meant it the way you read it. The afore mentioned poets in the author's note were all ab.. read more
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Jaycee, this is wonderful! Passion and love are give AND take. Love requires action, it's doing and being done. A circular engagement, most don't have the stamina for. You have to exercise it to keep it strong. Most are to lazy (selfish) to meet the needs of someone else for very long. Hurting people, hurt people. They may or may not intend to. It's a vicious cycle, compassion and understanding are required and an under developed part of the human race. I truly enjoyed this poem, jaycee. It's a strong statement in a tight neat little package :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Lynn, I love that when you look at my work, you bring a unique experience to it, that is different f.. read more
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8 Years Ago

BUT, the good guys DO work at it, as apposed to looking for something else to be selfish with :) You.. read more
JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Now we work at it after almost loosing it. We had a real wake-up call that called for major life de.. read more
There is no greater burning than the fire of passion - the unrestricted desire that, once unleashed, is difficult to control... this piece fits the title very, very well and those opening lines - with their demanding tone - clearly let the reader know that this is not some dilly-dallying crush in need of a quick fix; no, this is something that is far more explosive...

I love the play on 'blind leading the willing' - it's tough being the willing and having to watch as the blind lover bumbles about, not really understanding the desires of want... those burning needs...

...and yes, passion is, indeed, an unsurpassed journey that requires a cautionary sign...

I really felt the heat in this one, Jan, as well as the chill... and, I love the form.

Well-done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

....................

8 Years Ago

You are kindly welcome, Jan, and I never expect anything - I always read what is there and it is the.. read more
JayceeC

8 Years Ago

HMMM Interesting--Your objectivity indicates that I'm not always recognizing all the elements I'm pu.. read more
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8 Years Ago

Yes, on the last comment...
yep it burns......a lot.....
interesting format......
beautiful poetry!!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

I wonder how many will start writing them now? The Septet II is an easy form to write...there are va.. read more
Pushkar Prabhat

8 Years Ago

oh i will definitely try it......and the other forms you will introduce us to..........
I jus.. read more
You create a fire and demanded payment in the poem. I liked the poem. You said enough to make the point and left reader with a strong ending. Always better to taste the menu when the food is hot. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Well John some dishes become highly unappealing once they go cold. Passion definitely falls into tha.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
the last line tells the story,a great write jc

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

did you send a rr
JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Yes and you read it...I meant the last line,,,LOL
 wordman

8 Years Ago

there is no rr,and i didn`t see it on your page
i turn rr`s off and on,maybe it was off when .. read more
That's where it Hurts the most, when another turns away when the other is so much in love. You are very contrasted in your writing. I wish I had the words that you display so effortlessly (at least that's what I think) on you poems. Good one JAycee.

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

Sometimes we turn out of fear, and other passions, and yes the turn in away hurts. The first few li.. read more
Robert

8 Years Ago

As I said a good poem. I on the other hand suck at punctuation, but that's where I learn from you al.. read more
Can you say flaming unbridled lust that will not be denied, no, but JC can. Very strong power in this piece. Very aggressive. Thanks for sharing. Oh, I liked it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


JayceeC

8 Years Ago

a bit of classical with the new again. maybe I should quote some of the old guys in the notes..btw.. read more

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Added on May 19, 2015
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