If I Ruled The World

If I ruled the world

there'd be no lies

there'd be no pain

no one would die

no one would cry 

silently in the night

No girl would have to be afraid

of all these stupid fights.

In this kingdom 

that I rule

no one can ever

be so cruel

Things will all end peacefully

and even though it will rain

no one will stand around

and hide in their shame

ridding horses 

through the night

flying with wings

in the light

Never worrying 

about all the hate

Never worrying 

about being late

Even though we'll love

there will be no break

never will feel

our hearts ache

In this life

there will be a forever

between everyone

who's together

Could you imagine

a world like this

could you imagine

this sweet bliss

In this world I made

could we all stay

In this world of my own

that's so far away

Author's Note

Need some constructive criticism!!!

Reviews

[C. Rose]

"their will be no break" should be "there..."

I like how you grouped it into stanzas of eight lines.
I enjoyed the repetition, and you didn't make the mistake of going overboard on repeated lines. Well done.

Something to consider.
You could be more consistent. Have two repeated lines in each stanza in the same place. But you don't have to choose that format. Just something to consider.

[Jazmine Devine]

Thanks! I will defiantly make changes!