Formless Ancient Companion

Formless Ancient Companion

A Poem by Jazmen
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of the duality of man

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It is ancient.

Sprouting from the cracks of the house

Tip toeing through shadows
Crackling within the briar
It is pure.

And its ghostly silhouette

Crouching in the shallows
Defiant to eyes
Difficult to follow

Is it simply ripples from the mist/
Without a form(?)
Still sitting in the lake
Shadows, circling above and a daunting, pulsating quake 

Knock for dis ease

It is breeding infinitely
Squatting on the edge of the shore
An invisible deity
Crawls / as I walk the earthen floor
Sniffing the air as thunder booms

Our harvest ripening in our wombs.
But it is

A ghastliness that feeds on the meek
Gorging itself on corpses and oil soaked snakes




Focus to seek
The centipede and the grass
And the beauty all within
Clinging to the highness of Outherein
Focus to seek
In the mud in the graveyard creek
The invisible deity feasts
And I sprint to escape.

Knock for a dis at ease

As it caught up in the distance
And knocked me off my feet
Animal onlookers sneak.
Await the scents of defeat.
And move on.

We are
Spiraling kisses from one to the other, wrestling in sync
Sprinting
Tripping over shoes and large fallen trees
Fleshes flashing hot with elite, fearless nerves.
And shameless stars in dawn light disappear
Bound forever

Knock for dis ease
It’s ancient
It’s pure
Unable to slay, Unable to fear
Eternal.  Block. Slow poison cure.
Traveling lightly I walk.
And the other
Grinding its knees on volcanic rock
I am..Dancing as it feasts

Waiting for the promise of old
Dancing as the quest lives on

© 2013 Jazmen


Author's Note

Jazmen
Outherein - a place or a feeling/ Pertaining to the connection or commonalities of the soul and the center of the vast universe"

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This eloquently spooky piece strikes me as a gothic rendering of Time itself, in its implacably devouring mode -- "of the duality of man." One might say the silver lining is the devouring of Time by the Timeless. ;-) Your poem has a Dante-esque feel to it, the soul's passage through dark woods. . .Perhaps we all eventually awaken like Buddha under a talismanic tree & are no longer stalked by mortality -- any more than we are stalked by the overcoats we shed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Very gothic in the style and a tad dark, with a bit of light thrown in. Love it!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


I like the feel of the poem. I like the feel of ancient places. There is mystery and unknown. I enjoyed the places and the journey you took me in the poem.
"A ghastliness that feeds on the meek
Gorging itself on corpses and oil soaked snakes"
Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jazmen

7 Years Ago

your kindnesses brought a smile to my dull, early morning. I am a fan of that line too. One of my fa.. read more
I like it and it is a long wonderful poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


What an intriguing and stunning piece this is. Each verse deserves its own analysis. In as many days, this is the second poem that I reviewed involving black birds ... a symbol for Death and/or Darkness. Also, the use of outherein brings to mind an old Doors lyric ...

Wandering, wandering in hopeless night
Outherein the perimeter there are no stars
Out here we are stoned ... Immaculate.

Interesting, yes? Well, your approach to exploring the duality of man offers an unique perspective. Sometimes considered a philosophical illusion, duality is a relationship of seeming opposites ... and you have managed to create many here. It would seem to be an easy choice to say this beast is Time ... but my take is that it is the natural world that we inhabit "outherein". It is all open to interpretation and along the way you've kicked open more than a few doors that lead to some very curious rooms.

The last two lines seal the deal ... awesome ... as well as the seemingly random rhyming lines.

Excellent work ... once again.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jazmen

7 Years Ago

wow I never got around to replying to this review. I haven't had much timeto write lately at all.. t.. read more
Beautifully written. It flows well and fits together perfectly. Nice one :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


This eloquently spooky piece strikes me as a gothic rendering of Time itself, in its implacably devouring mode -- "of the duality of man." One might say the silver lining is the devouring of Time by the Timeless. ;-) Your poem has a Dante-esque feel to it, the soul's passage through dark woods. . .Perhaps we all eventually awaken like Buddha under a talismanic tree & are no longer stalked by mortality -- any more than we are stalked by the overcoats we shed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is good but I especially love how you began and ended it. It's descriptive, intriguing, and conclusive. Nice.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jazmen

7 Years Ago

thanks for reading and taking the time to review, I'm glad you liked this piece. Thanks again for th.. read more
Jasmine Thurber

7 Years Ago

I liked the beginning and end too!
Damn this is really indicative. I love the vivid imagery, highly descriptive word play, and the way you wrote it just sucks you right into the middle of what's happening within your poem. You could start a new genre with this particular style. If you haven't been published yet this poem here should be. This s**t kicks a*s. Great write. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jazmen

7 Years Ago

Wow thank you for all those wonderful compliments.. I want you to know how much it means to me, and .. read more
Lovely, beautifull, great flow, and outstanding poem! ^_^ I love it all!
You used extraordinary words, the most wonderful flow, a beautiful sight, and wrote it perfectly well. " We are Spiraling kisses from one to the other, wrestling in sync, Sprinting, Tripping over shoes and large fallen trees, And flashing hot with new fearless nerves. And shameless stars in dawn light disappear Bound forever" wow, just beautiful, it took my breath away. The ending... Amazing ... Just amazing, I love it! Please write more ^_^
Thanks for sharing!
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jazmen

7 Years Ago

I'm really really happy to hear how much you liked this, thank you for reading and taking the time t.. read more
Beautiful write of the duality of things . Like the opening lines especially.It is ancient.
Sprouting from the cracks of the house
Tip toeing through shadows
Crackling within the briar
It is pure. The last two lines powerful



Posted 7 Years Ago


Jazmen

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing, it was really awesome to read this when I woke up today, I appreciate your .. read more

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Jazmen
Jazmen

Pacific Northwest, WA



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