Here Comes The Rain

Here Comes The Rain

A Poem by Robert Luna
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Cross between a dream or nightmare and my interpretation of it. I hope you enjoy

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The Earth�s quivering heaps
silently cracked standing still
my heart laid dormant
preparing for a storm
Sleeping the sleep of the justified
but I haven�t slept in days
and no rest in sight
Translation of dark emerald grey
Fold and fall away
Morpheus�s lips drip wet
Upon his
Painfully passionate kiss

Embracing the darkness
As it chases the loneliness
of the light away
Falling deeper into dreams
Wishing to never awake

Sweet whispers speak

"Hold on to me
child of a mother�s
loveless love
Together we will fall
into a bottomless pit
Where we will
continuously drift the rift of time"

Empty souls join
Embodying danger

"Give yourself to me
Let yourself dream
I have such wonderful
Nightmares to bring

Sleep�sleep...just sleep
Maybe tonight I will take pity
upon your sleepless soul
Give you a chance at rest
Before I make you awake
with nightmarish screams
As you swing nicotine stained fists
at imaginary beasts

But you must sleeeeeep
So I can come out to play
Dark creature intertwine
Wooing in the pain of your mind
I will continue to
Talk sweetly in your ear
to remove your fears
Give you hope once again
This time you could win
Spin my beautiful lies
As I steal your life
Before the light of a new day
Chases me away"

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© 2008 Robert Luna


Author's Note

Robert Luna
Cross between a dream or nightmare and my interpretation of it. I hope you enjoy

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Such a scary dream to have, I can only imagine how a dream such as this would make me feel. It's beautifully written, so much so that it's easy to get lost in the words. As Brenda mentioned it does bring to mind depression but also of conflict. It almost as if there is a struggle to be free of something that feels bigger than you. I can definitely relate to that because I feel that way now and then too. How terrifying and helpless it leaves us and even worse, so vulnerable. Great writing, Robert you really took us there with you.

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.




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Sleep brings its own tragedy. The wounded and weary wonder aimlessly in an attempt to flee the haze of the walking dream state that is more real than any lifetime, and more tragic than any dream.

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

A very scary dream to have indeed. It's almost like your describing a night-terror. But there is something calming about this poem, all the while it still being scary. It brings my mind to places where I know that I'm not supposed to lurk. To places where I know that I'm not supposed to be.

An alluring write Robert.
Well Done.



Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

"Embracing the darkness
As it chases the loneliness
of the light away"

Only in nightmares would that stanza not be thought of as backwards. It's my favourite stanza, and I must tell you, it wasn't easy to choose.

I love this:
"But you must sleeeeeep
So I can come out to play"

The very essence of creepiness! This is an excellent piece, Robert.

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

oh robert, i love this piece... all the images that flashed into my head as i read each line - this is amazing - i enjoy your writing so much

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Great images ... the lack of sleep .. the nightmares .. i am thinking Freddie Kruger .. !
This one is a favorite for me .. very good writing and metaphoric.
The picture so stark .. the man looks so miserable and we can't see his face ..
Your words float well through my head.

Chloe
xoxo


Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

well done excellent write !!!!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

The dreamscape you create here is great.

Together we will fall
into a bottomless pit - I really liked this.

and this:

Translation of dark emerald grey
Fold and fall away
Morpheus's lips drip wet
Upon his
Painfully passionate kiss - brilliant!

Very well done!

NH


Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

such a complex journey through a troubled mind that seems to be lacking sleep. You took us as the reader to the depths of the darkness of your imagination and delivered us to a place we can see and almost taste.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This was so visual. I had my imagination have a ball seeing all the scenes you paint here.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I am both frightened and amazed by this piece. Imagery was great! Loved this piece! You really took your readers through your dream/nightmare.


Great Write

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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My name is Robert. I write therefore I feel I am. My words come from my heart, soul, and mind. I write what I feel and see, life is my inspiration. Life itself is art in its purest form. There is noth.. more..

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