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Pessimistic Rhyme

Pessimistic Rhyme

A Poem by Jenny Davis
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This month's VENT for my show, Vent Radio.

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Epedemia
Hysteria
These things
I want to say to ya
Close your eyes
not your ears,
reality
not fears
Written on a page
that screams rage
from within its cage
of blank


New York's Spitzer,
the monkey in the middle
can you solve the riddle
of the ring around the hosies
while human traffic

jams the forgotten posies


Tears wafting
in the noses
of those classified
rich or poor
the middle class died
with the war-
no one's keeping score,
what for


We've got drugs to drink
from our kitchen sink
and tires to burn in Suburbia
let the smoke flirt with ya
as the blackness signifies humanity
replaced with greed, ignorance and vanity
Where's Susan Powter
Can she really stop the insanity


Fat cats smiling
exercising patient profiling
Obesity a side effect
of technology
not biology
Religion overshadowed
by astrology
Look up criminology
it's just an analogy
for pharmaceuticals,
guinea pig festivals
hidden in a red carpet
smile


Falling apart at the seams
watch behind the scenes
as the girl in the size zero
is our newly appointed hero
Adopt an African child
and the crowd goes wild


The back row hisses
as pink lips blow kisses
winking at the distraction,
the attraction, she's caused
bigger than Jaws
the movie
While I, the would be
maybe-
poet
is pushed down
face up
compelled to write
this stuff


It's just a pessimistic rhyme,
with good reason.

© 2008 Jenny Davis


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Wow and yes and preach it sistah and amen to boot!!!! I read about Spitzer today and was just so angry and I'm also wondering how many other people like him were involved in this and if he's just the fall guy. Makes me so glad I don't vote.

Also consider doing this as spoken word...your poetic voice is particularly strong in this one.

Love it and off to put on my favorites!

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.




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The rise and fall, the mundane and the insane, from the 'A' listed to the no brainier - great rant! Almost proves the pessimist's thoughts are right, 'always expect the worst to happen in every situation'!

I read it again in a 'rap genre style' and it really worked!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I see, here you changed the style, this is more like a spoken word with a rhyme, so interesting, your talent, how are able to write multifacetted text. I missed your writing! I hope dear Jenny, you are fine those sunny spring days and I would love to hear from you. I still have your phone number but didn't want to disturb, didn't know the time when to call. I like how you wrote about society's issues and have woven it into a meaningful poem. Always a pleasure to read you, dear Jenny! I thought I send you this:

"O what a tangled web we weave,"

Marmion� (1808) canto 6, st. 17
Sir Walter Scott (1771-1832)
Scottish novelist and poet

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow wow wow... This is AWESOME! truly wonderful. AMEN! truly amazing I really LOVE it!

~Frances~

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love it!!! My kind of write. Wow!

Adding to my favorites... :)



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent, boy that says it all Jenny, great write! Shell

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh so nice beautifully written ,like a song ,lots of wisdom ,i like it

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Damn, you're talented. I can nearly hear your voice! Going in the favs! =)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This will go down a storm on the radio. Made to be performed.
You make some good points and express them in a cutting, no-hesitation way.
The rhyming speeds up the furious pace [appropriate, because it's fuelled by rage].

Nice work.

The good thing about it is, although it starts off addressing the audience directly, it doesn't alienate them like a sermon would, i.e. it's not saying LOOK WHAT YOU'VE DONE, instead it's a LOOK WHAT OUR WORLD IS DOING kind of thing. No excuses accepted, which provokes action without laying blame on the people you're trying to wake up.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very catitude. PSSSST! lol This was a great vent piece. I loved it.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very wonderfully written. Great job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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