Eleanor in the Water

Eleanor in The Water

Clear as crystal in my sight
I see you once again
drifting by as day meets night
bringing back the pain

You couldn't swim forever
no matter how you tried
but you had no care for tethers
and that was how you died

The stars were out that evening
we saw Venus I saw you
and as you slipped under the surface
there was nothing I could do

So now you swim before me
weed and starlight in your hair
and I tie these rocks around my feet
the river we shall share

Reviews

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

The sadness of this poem strikes out for me my friend.

[Bridgid Persephone Newm..]

Wistfully profound

[Lily Mae]

To me this is one of my favorites. Its deep and intense, and sad yet telling of a love so deep.. xx

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Oh my goodness Jeremy, this is tremendous! Wow!

[Judy Ponceby]

So sad and somber, but beautifully told.