A baby's perspective

I was stuck in a little space for as long as I could remember
I felt it's almost time to be free, I'll finally see my mother
I'm mostly cramped sometimes I stretch, I hear them say I'm kicking
Don't know don't care whatever it means, most of the time I'm sleeping

I wondered what was outside that soft pink wall
Will it be beautiful, will it be peaceful, will I be loved above all?
Will I have a home, will I have happiness, will I have parents who care?
Will I grow to be strong, bold and have no reason to fear?

I fantasies about the world outside each and every day
Receiving my portion of food from the one in whose belly I lay
It was finally time to be out, I'll be free at last
I felt a hand wrapped round my head and I'm pulled out quite fast

I opened my eyes and looked around this world new and bright
I immediately start to cry, out of fear, out of fright
For this new world that I'm in, is filled with sadness and sorrow
Danger and pain in every corner, no one is sure of tomorrow

I cried for what I've lost, in the comfort of my mother's womb all was peaceful
I cried for the pain that awaits, the challenges I would face, all so stressful
Immediately my crying subsides, when I saw her face and she smiled at me
In that instant I knew who she is, for there is no where else I would rather be
Her smile conveyed a promise, that she would always be there and be my friend
I smiled back at her, for I have found one who would love me till the end.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like the way you straddle a baby's perspective with an omnipotent perspective that knows more than the baby could possibly know. It works well in your poem, providing a fresh point of view, but also imparting words of wisdom that are both universal & metaphorical. At first glance, this seems to be about the baby & mother, but it could also be about any age person & God (or whatever significant intelligence a person might believe in). I like the way the baby's comfort level is going up & down, depending on what new aspects of life & future the baby is realizing. In the end, your unique message of hope is uplifting to all, not just the baby.

[Jerryyoung1z]

I find your words soothing. Thanks a lot for your thoughtful review

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A very unique perspective!

I like your idea very much; writing a poem from an unborn babies viewpoint. That this baby has fears already before it is born about the nasty world outside the womb.

Sections of this piece have a very well written rhyme sequence that makes the piece flow in a wonderful unstilted manner.

A very creative idea, Jerry. Nicely executed and with an uplifting message.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks a lot for your kind and thoughtful words,I really really do appreciate it.

[Najam Us Saher]

What a lovely poem. It is a unique idea to write on a baby's perspective. I loved the usage of words. Now I am starting to think that maybe really a baby thinks in the same way. 😁

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for stopping by, I do appreciate it.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome

[Dalton Wagoner]

I really like this! I've never seen someone use this perspective before!

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks a lot, I just wanted to try something new

[Anindita Janhabee]

This piece is unique.. ..
so nice to read such a poem from a baby's perspective... reminds me of myself... when I was stuck in the pink walls ... and my kick, how it brought smiles on my mom's face...
so sweet as you write this...!!!
Thanks for your share dear...
Anindita😃

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for stopping by to drop your thoughts on my page, I do appreciate.

[Anindita Janhabee]

My pleasure!!!

[Lorry]

Fantastic read. So original and thought provoking.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review

[Coyote Poetry]

A child eyes. Make the world a better place.
"Her smile conveyed a promise, that she would always be there and be my friend
I smiled back at her, for I have found one who would love me till the end."
I enjoyed the story leading to good ending. Thank you Jerry for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks a lot for stopping by:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.