Beachin'

Caught myself daydreaming about a beach and it was so lovely that I had to share.

Here in my daydream I want to be

Bathed in sunshine, stretched next to the sea

Looking out onto an endless horizon

Everything is perfect on my tropical island

Where the seagulls sing me songs

And nothing feels wrong

The waves gently rolling, a blissful lullaby

I breath the briny air, and let out a sigh

sunlight dances across open water

Here in paradise I am The Ocean's daughter

Now all that's missing is a drink in my hand 

Perfection is where the sea meets the land

Author's Note

please critique

Reviews

[Chris]

Daydreams have a way of focusing our thoughts in thought-full directions... don't they?

This one left a melancholic aftertaste... sigh.

[SmittyJas]

Lovely seaside romance with the sun and the sand to get yourself a tan. Sounds like a great daydream.

[Stephen Bell]

This made me feel so trouble free for a few minutes, thank you for that.x

[Riley]

I can only think that you might add how you and the beach physically our interact, how you and the sand play, or something along those lines because other than that it is beautiful :)

[McBear]

This is beautiful.. I loved the imagery.. Maybe some of the wording didn't flow right. If you don't mind, here is a remake of it just a few words changed, to give you an idea c:

Here in my daydream, I want to be
bathed in sunshine, as I lay stretched next to the calming sea.
I look out onto an endless horizon.
Everything is perfect on my tropical island.
Where the seagulls sing me songs,
and nothing feels wrong
The waves gently rolling, a blissful lullaby to my senses.
I breath the briny air, and let out a sigh.
sunlight dances across open water,
here in paradise I am The Ocean's daughter.
Now all that's missing is a drink in my hand.
Perfection is where the sea meets the land

WAIT! Before you comment on this. I know the rule of thumb is you can'y change someones poetry because only the poet knows what they wanted. I only did this because I wanted you to see how I transformed parts using different word choice and adding a few things.

[Jessalynn]

I like seagulls, but I wouldn't change the rest of it it messes with the rhythm and rhyme when I read it out loud. I'm going to change that to seagulls though thanks:) by the way read OCD loved it !!!

[McBear]

Okie, no problem c: I am happy to help! I am glad I did. Thanks!!! Im glad you liked it. Make sure to leave a review if you haven't