The Eyes Which Hold the Universe

The Eyes Which Hold the Universe

A Poem by [email protected]!
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This is my first villanelle:)

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What is a smile?

in a pair of sparkling irises it lies

I think I'll stay here for a while

because his absence brings unavoidable sighs

I always wonder when he cries,

"What is a smile?"

Its a calloused hand that tries

to wipe away the traces of worldly lies

I think I'll stay here for a while

The world lays quiet, cleansed of all its cries

and I can answer the question that pries,

"What is a smile?"

Its the array of midnight silk that lies

around perfect emerald eyes

I think I'll stay here for a while

His lips are angel's wings in disguise

and in his kiss my heart breaks free of the skies

What is a smile?

I think I'll stay here for a while

© 2008 [email protected]!


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Just a really very wonderful poem. A lovely villanelle.
I think your use of imagery is perfect - powerful and vivid. I really felt that I was soaked in the moment and in the thoughts and feelings of the narrator.
I will definately be adding this to my favourite poems from the sight. So expect more comments from me on this one.
A huge congrats on this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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WoW ... very very nice indeed !!!
Such wonders is a smile !!!
What a most beautiful piece !!!
Really really well written indeed !!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really liked this poem. It was sweet and romantic, but not clich�. The choice of images and your use of metaphors are perfect too. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so cute!! very good job at your first villanelle :D it reminded me a pit of Edgar Allen Poe, except not dark but light :D this is very romantic and had great imagery. well done :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OMG!! THAT WAS AMAZING!!! Simply perfect!! Your first 'villanelle"...can't believe it!! You seem to be expert at this...hehehe
I loved this peace. The rhyme is sweet beyond imagination. It's like a soft music is playing everytime I read this. The title is perfect...
Oh! Man! I gotta read it one more time...
SUPERB!! VERY WELL PENNED!! LOVED IT!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Just a really very wonderful poem. A lovely villanelle.
I think your use of imagery is perfect - powerful and vivid. I really felt that I was soaked in the moment and in the thoughts and feelings of the narrator.
I will definately be adding this to my favourite poems from the sight. So expect more comments from me on this one.
A huge congrats on this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aww I love how you kept saying after 'What is a smile?' "I think I'll stay here for a while"
That part is so.... at peace??
It brings a closure to the piece and a happy one at that :)
Great work


Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow really beautiful, I really like the line "Its the array of midnight silk that lies

around perfect emerald eyes"



Posted 12 Years Ago


I like this poem. you did a good job on it. :)
nice.

Posted 12 Years Ago


You haved illustrate with words words a beautiful poem. Nice work on the "villanelle" ;-). *Lana*

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Indeed. A smile is all those little things. Nice work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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My name is Heather, I'm twenty, future author and english teacher, highly analytical, The Vampire Diaries, A Tale of Two Cities, both classic and modern literature, the Victorian era, Coco Chanel, ext.. more..

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