Chapter One

Chapter One

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Christian's point of view

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        Christian was wary as he took in the scene before him. No less then twenty girls, all of Jackson's ex-girlfriends, were gathered in one place, and they had alcohol. Anyone who knows Jackson knows that that is a very, very bad sign. He saw Jackson's current girlfriend, Nina, sprawled out on the ground and laughing as she tore up pictures of the two of them. "Dear God Almighty", Christian muttered. "What the hell did he do?"



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Well to continue with the theme...I was captured, and I really cannot wait to see where you go with this. There are so many avenues, and my mind is taking off, wandering over what possibly could happen next. Good work and keep it up, but don't burn yourself out. This could turn into an amazing story! Thumbs up!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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ok the stage is set.. so what does he do and how does she react?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Okay, please continue on! The teeny weeny bit that sound really intersting cannot just cut off. I would like to know what happens! :P This has tons of potential and I hope that you pick up the pen and keep on writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Again, it had me captured and I'm a curiouse to see where you go with this. Simple, yet highly entertaining this passage was.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Cool story. I'm looking forward to more.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Easily comparible to an unarmed police officer looking onto a scene of drug smugglers drinking and enjoying themselves. I don't know what I would do...
I'm curious to knw how Chris handles this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short but very effective. Can't help but want to read more.
I hope you keep writing this. You have an excellent start here!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hey, this is good. i really really like it, dood. keep writing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

What a great start. I am captured, when I read the title I was not sure what to expect, keep it going, lets see where it ends up...

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

After reading the Prologue I am anxously waiting to read the rest of this story. This is certainly an excellent start on this chapter. You have the hook baited well. LOL Very well written. I would buy this book myself. Great job, keep writing and let the story develop itself.


Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I have to say that I found myself caught up in the story, which as you already know setting the hook is the most important! Ha, I have had the ground slap me in the face several times.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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My name is Heather, I'm twenty, future author and english teacher, highly analytical, The Vampire Diaries, A Tale of Two Cities, both classic and modern literature, the Victorian era, Coco Chanel, ext.. more..

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