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Claustrophobic

Claustrophobic

A Poem by [email protected]!

Irritating
the word across my mind
Aggravation of the worst kind


The radio's blasting and it smells like teen spirit,
but I'm not really a teen anymore
so I suppose I just don't get it.


My name is on the pavement,
my hands are full of chalk.
There is a different road
on which I'm meant to walk.


According to the Godsent,
it wouldn't be a smart choice.


"This is the road to choose,
upon all others you will loose"
This is their cry,
but I still want to try.


This tiny loving space might be suffocating
should I choose to sit here waiting.


The longer I sit, the heavier it becomes
I want different air to fill my lungs


Perhaps its immaturity,
Maybe I should choose security.

Maybe I'm allowing impatience to destroy my common sense.

 

But looking through the window,

the road looks safe...

and half of me only wants to run in haste

© 2010 [email protected]!


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"The longer I sit, the heavier it becomes
I want different air to fill my lungs"

Yes. Perfect. I feel like I was in the car with you...
This is wistful, disillusioned and ultimately hopeful. If only tentatively.

"the road looks safe...
and half of me only wants to run in haste"
Powerful. I do believe I have been on that rode once or twice, myself.
The structure is well constructed. It flows perfectly, and the mood is painted so clearly.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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this expresses your feelings so well! I love your word choices in this. The little bird longs to fly from the nest. And so many feelings at once, longing, exuberance, impatience and also, a bit of fear and doubt. Great write!

Posted 6 Years Ago


i love this its so awesome.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I love this rhythm and the indecision you have, contemplating on the choices very captivating, makes me question it as though I'm your situation. Wonderful wording, I'm envious of how well you constructed it. :}

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"The longer I sit, the heavier it becomes
I want different air to fill my lungs"

Yes. Perfect. I feel like I was in the car with you...
This is wistful, disillusioned and ultimately hopeful. If only tentatively.

"the road looks safe...
and half of me only wants to run in haste"
Powerful. I do believe I have been on that rode once or twice, myself.
The structure is well constructed. It flows perfectly, and the mood is painted so clearly.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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My name is Heather, I'm twenty, future author and english teacher, highly analytical, The Vampire Diaries, A Tale of Two Cities, both classic and modern literature, the Victorian era, Coco Chanel, ext.. more..

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