The Way of It

And darkness became her

defined and divined her

consumed and illumed her

 

And over her shoulder, she’d

looked into the madness of despair

and knew

 

          the way of the world

 

And the heart of her

the dawn and persistence of her

fractured

 

          but did not break

 

And as the innocence of her

the simplicity and naiveté of her

shattered on the altar of clarity

 

her tears joined the cosmic chorus

of empathy and pathos

 

And over her shoulder

her straight and strong shoulders

glittered her first dawn

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Seems more a realisation that nothing is quite as it seems, that vision can sometimes distort truth, tis only emotional purity that really wins in the end.

It's interesting to read your other reviewers' comments, how people see and analyse differently, less or more, pro or con; to me your words are always extraordinary, always make one think and feel.

[Gandré]

some women are mystery and understand to keep it, that's the way to perfect relationship. :)) I loved this.

[Ed Hart]

yes, she did not break, and her straight and strong shoulders lifted her wonderful heart

[WhiteWillow]

"Shattered on the altar of clarity." Absolutely love this line!

This piece speaks to me of resilience, and its realization. When one experiences the darkest depths of human emotion, yet survives (the way you isolated the line "but did not break"), you discover an inner strength you never knew existed within you.

[Mark D]

I really enjoyed this. I found it positive. Thank you

[Lalli]

Beautifully written,

Great flow, vivid imagery, creativity, and I love its depth.

For me, this seemed like a moment of perceived truth. An experience that altered this young woman's view. More so, a shifting from innocence to experience. Although the nature of the poem, speaks of an awakening and transformation to consciousness to the perceived truth of how the world is through the eyes of the author.

But is it all despair? or is that simply a fraction or even a fracture to a larger picture. Our mind sees what it chooses, what are you looking for? :)

excellent write.. very thought provoking. thank you

much love n' respect

-Lalli

[Mockingbird]

going from experience to innocence. having been shown the contents of pandora's box and surviving. the words are beautiful.

[....]

You are a very powerful writer.
I felt heart and soul put into this write.
I can feel the emotions string along.
Awesome!