Life of The Girl Who Regrets;

Traped~

At the end,

as I drown,

Life pushes me down.

as much as the beauty of life took my breath away in my youth,

it takes my breath now.

I cave under the mass amount of pressure,

that sits apon my chest.

oh, how i crave just one more day.

But don't we all?

Just one more day

people with no regret,

see there life flash before there eyes...

I see only the life i wasted...

spending my time staring at the top,

all the while my life was slowly pulled from under me.

which leaves me here.

drowning in pain and sorrow, 

never to get another taste of air.

not as life pushes me down.

my only salvation,

what waits in the unknown beneath me

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

Sometimes it seems like the world has dumped all the pain on you and you alone, every day is just a day nearer death and release. You always think there just isn't a way out, yet people find a way out of worse situations. Baggage and reinvention. Dump the baggage, reinvent yourself, climb the hill to freedom.

[Jinx Bane]

This is a piece of art all in itself, thank you for the comment.

[Anxiety]

You just put all of my pain into words. Everything you have have felt so have I and the way you word your poem has so much beauty to it. I love this poem but in a way you and I are very simmilar.

[James Paranormal]

What exists under the surface, under the surface of a new beginning. So passionate and heartfelt. The poem speaks volumes. You did a great job!

[Jinx Bane]

Thank you so much for the review and wise words :)

[light and ashes]

A important lesson some learn too late.....
Can I ask a question?
Did the girl commit suicide or are the waters of pain and sorrow just a metaphor?
I see her drowning herself and saying these things before she goes under.

[Jinx Bane]

This girl was thinking of her hypothetical death, and is ashamed shes to much of a coward to die and to weak to live. I'm still not sure what will happen to her, ig we will find out. Thank you for the review and the observant eye.

[light and ashes]

You're welcome and how extremely sad....
I hope she finds some courage.

[Franky]

This is haunting.....and a little scary. As always, I hope for a happy ending.

[Jinx Bane]

Sorry i didn't reply with a thanks sooner, I'm traveling and it took a lil while for me to settle in, but Thank you for the comment and review along with the hope of a happy ending.

[Franky]

You are welcome! This was well done.