The Betrayer

The Betrayer

A Poem by Joan*Eckhart
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The title says it all...

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The world became a dark place,
When you betrayed me,
I have lost.
You have defeated me.

My love,
In my heart did I keep you,
Safe from harm.

Hypnotized,
You pierced my soul,
With nothing but a smile,

You would leave me?
For her.
I never expected.

Go then, traitor.
Go in peace.
Fear nothing.

Is there anything sweeter,
They ask,
Than being in love?

Just wait,
Friend,
Until you taste the bitterness,
Of deceit.

© 2013 Joan*Eckhart


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Very emotional piece, I love the austerity of the final stanza. Beautiful writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
"Hypnotized,
You pierced my soul,
With nothing but a smile,"

These struck me as very powerful lines- smiles can impact nearly everyone in the world, and they can clearly set off a chain reaction of wonderful feelings...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)

8 Years Ago

You're welcome.
sounds like a bereft soul, very moving

Posted 8 Years Ago


Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thanks again.
It actually made me want to cry. The words just sink in. Beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
Ah! I'm so very glad I picked this piece to read.
It's so beautiful and flows off the page with perfect rhythm.
It's also very relate-able and I love relate-able.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by.
This is deep. Deceit is a hard thing to forgive and to forget. :(

Posted 8 Years Ago


Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

So true. Thank you the review.
Very well written. I adore the line that reads, "Hypnotized, You pierced my soul, With nothing but a smile." Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thanks again!
that was so nice and true ...
and being in love isnt sweet as you said at the end bitterness will show its like the sweets that at first sweet them bitter

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thanks!
stars are far

8 Years Ago

Welcome
So true.. so sad...

"Is there anything sweeter, they ask, than being in love?
Just wait, friend, until you taste the bitterness of deceit." - Wonderful two stanzas, love the sweet vs bitterness part.

Great poem =D

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A poem that is emotionally pungent, the anger and distrust are plain to read here,
hatred in it's perfect black dress, excellent.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joan*Eckhart

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading.

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Added on December 30, 2012
Last Updated on January 16, 2013
Tags: Betrayal, Heartache, Sadness, Loneliness

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