The Betrayer

The title says it all...

The world became a dark place,
When you betrayed me,
I have lost.
You have defeated me.

My love,
In my heart did I keep you,
Safe from harm.

Hypnotized,
You pierced my soul,
With nothing but a smile,

You would leave me?
For her.
I never expected.

Go then, traitor.
Go in peace.
Fear nothing.

Is there anything sweeter,
They ask,
Than being in love?

Just wait,
Friend,
Until you taste the bitterness,
Of deceit.

Reviews

[Rose Kavanagh]

Very emotional piece, I love the austerity of the final stanza. Beautiful writing!

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thank you so much.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

"Hypnotized,
You pierced my soul,
With nothing but a smile,"

These struck me as very powerful lines- smiles can impact nearly everyone in the world, and they can clearly set off a chain reaction of wonderful feelings...

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thank you!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

You're welcome.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

sounds like a bereft soul, very moving

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thanks again.

[Carissa Marie]

It actually made me want to cry. The words just sink in. Beautiful.

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thank you.

[ForeverNever]

Ah! I'm so very glad I picked this piece to read.
It's so beautiful and flows off the page with perfect rhythm.
It's also very relate-able and I love relate-able.

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thanks for stopping by.

[Purplerose]

This is deep. Deceit is a hard thing to forgive and to forget. :(

[Joan*Eckhart]

So true. Thank you the review.

[Ellen Henry]

Very well written. I adore the line that reads, "Hypnotized, You pierced my soul, With nothing but a smile." Great job!

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thanks again!

[stars are far]

that was so nice and true ...
and being in love isnt sweet as you said at the end bitterness will show its like the sweets that at first sweet them bitter

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thanks!

[stars are far]

Welcome

[The Nameless]

So true.. so sad...

"Is there anything sweeter, they ask, than being in love?
Just wait, friend, until you taste the bitterness of deceit." - Wonderful two stanzas, love the sweet vs bitterness part.

Great poem =D

[I, Rene]

A poem that is emotionally pungent, the anger and distrust are plain to read here,
hatred in it's perfect black dress, excellent.

[Joan*Eckhart]

Thank you for reading.