Where they have been

A poem I wrote to express my sadness over what happened to the Jews during World War II.

Children crying

People dying

Screams for help all around

Innocents collapsing on the ground

People longing for some love

Prayers sent to heaven above

Hope so dim, hearts broken

Everywhere last words are spoken

Such pain our eyes have never seen

Fear of what is to come

 Trying to hold on to what has been

High fences, no way to peace

So many killed for their beliefs

Hate as fog in the air

Faith replaced by fear

The world is slowly ripped apart

While the few survivors cry in the dark

Because of lives lost and no new start

Cause nothing can erase what they have seen

What they have been through

Where they have been

Author's Note

Keep in mind that this is a serious subject, poem is not written to create any type of political or historical discussion.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

A tribute piece of a write...I've read a few about the subject matter here at the Cafe...and you illustrate another outlook into the events of the times during the war...

[Johanna]

Thankyou, means a lot

[Glen Yumang Manese]

u R welcome...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Very sad but true piece I enjoyed it
this was my fav line :)
High fences, no way to peace
So many killed for their beliefs.
I really like that line was great.

[Johanna]

Thankyou :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

ur welcome :)

[MaliKate]

Now it deserves my 100% :)

[MaliKate]

Well, being a "Jew" myself, I certainly appreciate the poem. But I'm sure there is a better term to refer to us as. Such as "someone of Jewish heritage" for example. Or descendants of Israel. And as for the use of the word "Jews" in the poem, it feels like you're talking about dominoes all tumbling over one another. It sounds rather cheap. We're not set apart from the world as "Jews"... we're like you - we're people. So if you could change the word to "innocents" or "people" then that'd be awesome.

It's nicely penned otherwise and it gets the message across.

As for some errors:

"So many killed for their believes" should be "So many killed for their beliefs"

"Hate as fog in the air" would make more sense as "Hate like fog in the air" or "Hate hangs like fog in the air"

"The world is slowly ripped a part" should be "The world is slowly ripped apart"

Overall, it's beautiful to see somebody so passionate about these people that suffered so much for the most ridiculous, inexcusable reasons. I love that there are people who acknowledge this tragedy without prejudice against the victims. I admire that greatly.

I love it. Good job.

[Johanna]

Hi :) I agree with you, just haven´t seen it before. I´ll change it right away, thankyou so much for reading and reviewing! I´m gonna fix the errors as well :)

It means a lot to me that you liked it. This poem is really important to me, thankyou for making it even better :)

[Rahul]

I'm speechless this time but i loved this
The world is slowly ripped a part
While the few survivors cry in the dark, nicely penned, a deep write again came from your heart and yes, showed some discussion that should be done in real life with that issue.
again a great and an amazing job...i love your work.

[Johanna]

Thankyou so much! It really means a lot to me that you like my work. I´ve just joined this website today, and already it´s giving a lot back to my writing, thanks to people like you. I´m glad the poem got through to you.. it´s a poem that means a lot to me.

[~Nina~]

Nice poem with a good moral. Great work!

[Johanna]

Thankyou :)