I wanted to

I wanted to

A Poem by Johanna
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Got inspired by some james bay music..

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I wanted to trust you

But I let my worries get in between

Now I´ll just wait for rain to fall and wash my conscience clean


I wanted to love you

But I let our differences push you away

If I had told you to just go, would you have stayed?


I wanted to know you

But I let my fears drag us apart

And now you're sitting right in front of me and I can't see where you are


I wanted to hold you

But I let my worries get in between

You could have held me, now I´ll never know what could have been

© 2015 Johanna


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The write reminds me a very beautiful melted-down song "The Breath" - "Police" (Every breath you take). Short poetry contains much depth of words within its stanzas. Liked it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I really like the poem Johanna. I like the flow of it all the way to the last line. You had a really good rhyming scheme all the way through which made it flow really well. Between and clean, away and stayed, Apart and are but the between and been dont fit the scheme. I maybe would change it to But I let my worried get in between, You could have held me, now "our" future will never be seen. Maybe something like that just to keep the flow and rhyming. Just a thought... I really like this poem... good job :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Johanna

9 Years Ago

Thankyou so much Aaron :) Love the feedback.. will look at it later on today and see what I can do :.. read more
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Awesome... I like your style :) keep sharing
Sad piece, unfortunately we sometimes mess a good thing up!
I'm guilty as well, this piece is really good and thanks for sharing, b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Johanna

9 Years Ago

Bless you too :)
Thankyou so much for reading:)
you're sitting right in front of me and I can't see where you are

this is a great line. the whole thing is well done. you just left out the capitalization of But in the second line and And in the 9th :P

Posted 9 Years Ago


Johanna

9 Years Ago

will fix it :) thankyou so much :)

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Johanna
Johanna

Norway



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