Crease

Crease

A Poem by Jong Schrijver

The folded note
Atop the drawer
Goodbye she wrote
And nothing more
Why did she go
I wish I knew
And I don't know
To whom she flew

I sit up crying
Reread that note
Inside I'm dying
Like a sinking boat
No way to forget
Yet I still try
Sometimes I regret
That I don't know why

Like a bird without wings
I thought my life was done
Even though the pain still stings
There's times when there is none
But I'll never fully forget
I'll look at the note and see her
I always thought we were set
Before that crease in the paper

© 2010 Jong Schrijver


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i know how that feels it's like a little piece of me is dying inside
the love that u thought would always be there is somehow gone so fast
love the poem good jod
Thanks
love tatiana andrea perez harris tuner

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow, the ending comes out of no where and really hits the reader like
a brick wall. as in visual perception from an emotion to physical
all in one smooth motion. what i liked here, the rhymes and passion,
romantic, you are a true romantic my friend keep it going.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really like this!!! It's really sad but wicked good. I agree with Roaslyn and Kasey, it could be a song.

Posted 10 Years Ago


i like what your doing here, your ryhtmes in this poem fit the ryhme and natural pattern of the poem the best out of what i read. Good Job! keep writing

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow really great :D I agree with Kasey 100% and I wish I had more to say but I feel like I'd just be repeating her about how this could totally be a song and I really do love how the title corresponds with the end line, it almost makes it like a circle :) really really great :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow. This could be a song. I like how you draw attention to the crease line at the end by making the title of the poem 'Crease'. Flawless rhyme and great rhythm. You rhyme without compromising meaning, and it's not forced at all. Great job. This is probably one of my favorite poems of yours. Again, good job branching out and writing new types of poems.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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