Sam Stabbed Mother

Having some fun with a quatrain. Enjoy!

In came Sam, soaked in blood red;
he sat at the table to wait.
"Sister Mary, mother's dead."

I guess dinner tonight will be late...

Author's Note

I wanted to keep all the lines with seven syllables, but I really didn't like how it flowed. I added "he" in the second line and "tonight" in the last line, and I'm much happier. What do you think?

I wanted to attract people's attention with the title. I'm open to suggestions for any other titles!

I have no idea what is with me lately, been kind of in a "bloody" mood, I guess. Enjoy this bizarreness! :)

Reviews

[Annette Jay Sweeney]

It seems every writer goes through little phases. I can't seem to get out of a gay rights one... lol.

[just rose.]

Love the irony and black humor in this little tale. Well done!

[Michael X]

i think you should've mastered the seven syllables with a smoothe flow, and the term "blood red" lost it for me because its such an overused expression.
the rhyming is still choppy. but the title is Excellent! and humorous in context.but
the unfortunately the poem isn't as good. let me knowmif you revise this

[indu]

wish i could see Sister Mary's reaction :D

[Tia Sanchez]

LOL. Funny last line. Nice little write, the title definitely drew me in.

[gimpy]

I know it sounds twisted but I thought this poem was Hilarius at first I thought it was a hiko but it was 7 7 but it was still a great write