Awash

For Creative Poetry Extra

Be thee privy

to the cascading

whispers of the

tides continuous?

To the tranquil

bubbling and splashing

of light, translucent

fluid?

Saturated in the

unpredictable motion

of the flowing 

river of a mind 

wandering.

Author's Note

7.23.11 Words: Fluid. Splashing. Tranquil. Saturated. Cascading. Privy. Tides. Bubbling. Unpredictable. Continuous.
Thank you for the help in editing Jon. :)

Reviews

[...]

beautiful written
your words are immersed
in this flowing river

great title

[Allen Smuckler]

Waterworld? and so serene...unlike Lily (lily, you there?)...I don't quite see the same sensuality as she and her warped mind does...:)) I see more of a cleansing of spirit...almost a rebirth of sorts....discovery and reflection.
But what do I know...I only know what I feel..
Great write, Judy
allen

[Tate Morgan]

Well thats sure interesting

[Marshal Gebbie]

Loved it Judy..I am privy to the warm sensations of sensuousness of tidal flow.
I shall post my poem "Tidal" just so you can see that I lie not to you dear lady.

[blakjassy]

I totally agree with Lilly!! This has a very sensual feel to it!

[Lily Mae]

I don't know if it's just my potty mind but to me this is very sensual.. Quietly seductive... maybe it's because my mind is like a flowing river of wandering thoughts lol..xx I love this...xx

[FJ Davis]

Has a medieval feel (though "privies" are known to exist in relatively modern times.)
In truth, a lovely, curiously refreshing and pensive creation.
You are much more than you, apparently, will ever know, dear lady.

[blakjassy]

I love that this is simple and to the point. I like the elegance of it and the very liquid (no pun intended) flow of the words.

[ALifeAquatic]

My only criticism of this piece would be the structure which you have used. I think it would be stronger if you had shorter lines, which would help the cascading flow of the imagery.

Jon