Mind Demon

The crystalline 

chandelier

swaying 

above my head

careens wildly 

to and fro.

 

A pinwheel of

fire

revealing

bizarre patterns.

My mind too 

twirls about

madly

seeking answers.

Looking for the key 

to shut away

this dark demon

haunting my mind 

with

its 

whispers.

Author's Note

Edited with assistance from a fine gentleman :) Thank you.

Reviews

[Shadin Manning]

This feeling is too familiar great job!

[Pebbles]

Absolutely love the darkness here x

[Rene Velez]

I call it my politically incorrect side :) huge visuals for a poem short in words...really good Judy.

[Chris]

I liked the aftertaste of this...

Well done Judy.
Chris

[Scallywagg]

I so understand the sentiment of this work. Your layout is really good as it provoked me through.
I really appreciate this piece in it's minimalistic state as I find it off-putting when there are many unnecessary connective words.
This just rolls. Love it thank you

[Kenneth The Poet]

Sweet write. I chuckled. Sounds like he wants to stay inside your mind. I suggest you keep him there.

[Lily Mae]

Weird I have the same demon whispering to me... excellent write Judy...

[Richielee]

ooooh Judy...like it, like it alot in fact.Very eerie and mysterious leaving the reader to summise what is really occuring, metaphoric magic from a great lady and wonderul chocolate loving poet ! : ))))

[FJ Davis]

You too, eh?
Due to your vivid portrayal, the reader is placed right in the middle of it.
Lyrical, flows nicely--very well-done.
A little unsettling, Judy.