Mind Demon

The crystalline chandalier

swaying above my head,

careens wildly to and fro.

Like a whirling pinwheel 

on fire,

illuminating bizarre patterns

in the shadowed lane.

My mind too twirls about

madly, seeking answers.

Seeking a way to overcome

this dark demon

haunting my mind with

its whispers.

Reviews

[Shadin Manning]

This feeling is too familiar great job!

[Pebbles]

Absolutely love the darkness here x

[Rene Velez]

I call it my politically incorrect side :) huge visuals for a poem short in words...really good Judy.

[Chris]

I liked the aftertaste of this...

Well done Judy.
Chris

[Scallywagg]

I so understand the sentiment of this work. Your layout is really good as it provoked me through.
I really appreciate this piece in it's minimalistic state as I find it off-putting when there are many unnecessary connective words.
This just rolls. Love it thank you

[Kenneth The Poet]

Sweet write. I chuckled. Sounds like he wants to stay inside your mind. I suggest you keep him there.

[Lily Mae]

Weird I have the same demon whispering to me... excellent write Judy...

[Richielee]

ooooh Judy...like it, like it alot in fact.Very eerie and mysterious leaving the reader to summise what is really occuring, metaphoric magic from a great lady and wonderul chocolate loving poet ! : ))))

[FJ Davis]

You too, eh?
Due to your vivid portrayal, the reader is placed right in the middle of it.
Lyrical, flows nicely--very well-done.
A little unsettling, Judy.