Unveiled

~ photograph compliments of smashingshowcase ~

 

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It was simply a charade, yet in your glance

the moon and stars they rose for you and me

and petals gently fell as flowers danced

on whispers from your lips, sweet poetry

 

Veiled my eyes, weakened knees with a just a breath

‘til winds blew wild and cold and as I feared

the tide drifting with love and tenderness

swept it all away and disappeared

 

As moon and stars and eyes grew dim as night

a glimmer of the dawn met skies of blue

your graceful serenade shamed in the light

once hidden in shadows of love thought true

 

The ending now quite clear, I can’t disguise

somewhere deep inside…I loved the lies

~~~

 

 

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Hi Julie,
just read this one.
It's not surprising that a lot of your reviewers, like me, are men. Why can't we men find ladies like you in the physical world. We'd love to find someone with such insight, such a use of words, such a display of inner feelings. Your writing never disappoints.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. I think it may be a bit easier to share feelings in poetry than in the physical world...at least it is for me. :) Julie

[FateDictates]

you weaved such lyrical honest words that left me scarred..I get it.. you've certainly got it!!

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[AprilRN1210]

What a beautiful heartfelt piece. Secretly I think a lot of us want our fairytale happy ever after that we sugar coat reality into something that eventually goes sour. It is easy to get wrapped up in our own emotions making it difficult to see through the lies. The soft romantic glow may help weaken a gullible heart but the light of day is less forgiving. Awesome job!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[AprilRN1210]

With such a beautiful piece, it was definitely my pleasure:)

[Muse]

In love with all of the lies because it was just easier that way.

What a heart-breaking write. Sometimes we are so blinded by love, we fail to see the truth. And when we do finally see the truth, we unfortunately come to realize, that in ignorance... comes true bliss.

[MsJewel]

It is easier to believe the lies...Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate your kind words. :) Julie

[adreamer]

It illuminate ones raw emotions so beautifully from what is or not, this a very heartfelt one Julie. in so many ways.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Larry :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"tell me lies tell me sweet little lies, tell me lies, oh no you can't disguise, no you can't disguise"
your poem made me think of Fleetwood Mac--one of their best songs.

once the light comes up, that which seems so loving and romantic in the night, turns to the shame of lies.

really intense write, Julie...

jacob

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Jacob :) Julie

[wordman]

you have a way about you with all those beautiful stanzas julie

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

"Veiled my eyes, weakened knees with a just a breath
‘til winds blew wild and cold and as I feared
the tide drifting with love and tenderness
swept it all away and disappeared"
I like the words above. Good to feel weaknen, even in a lie. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Julie.

[Trace]

This poem is so full of raw emotions and heartfelt feelings,
that bleed from every line....
like a broken heart for two people that fell in love
Yet simply could not be together
But still want to believe the feelings never changes

And hope they never will.

This poem has always meant a lot to me....
and you will always mean the world to me.

HUGGS. ... XOXOX. ..TRACE

[MsJewel]

...or one is just a big fat liar and the other one a gullible believer in fairytales and happily ever after..
But your thoughts are nicer.

I love you too! Hugs, Julie

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

OUCH, there is nothing like finding out the love you thought you had was an empty vase… wow a powerfully sorrowful poem… you always maze me with you poetry.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Always my pleasure julie.