Dream Thief

Dream Thief

A Poem by MsJewel
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~ a rhyming serpentine verse ~

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Pale as ivory, when the moonlight’s pale
dreams of true love fill a lover’s dreams
Veiled eyes for one whose heart remains veiled
Seems his love was just not what it seems

Heart beats slowly, for deep in my heart
time stands so still in a dream like time
Part of my heart, he’s stolen in part
Crime of passion, a terrible crime

 

Sweet memories of his love so sweet
stales in daylight as the fantasy stales
Repeat at night as love’s warm repeat
Tales of romance, these bittersweet tales


Bad can feel so good, until it turns bad

Crazy for him, he tells me I’m crazy

Sad as it is, it’s true though I’m sad

Daisies smile for he’s pushing up daisies

 

Crime of passion, a terrible crime

Dreams can’t let go, he still sneaks into dreams

Time cannot heal a love out of time

Seems his love was just not what it seems…

 

© 2015 MsJewel


Author's Note

MsJewel
~ a rhyming serpentine verse I've been working on and revised based on the tongue in cheek humor of Paul Robert's fantastic art ~ "Fickle Heart"

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Julie, I have missed reading you so much... Reading your poetry brings so much peace to me, no matter the topic, I know that in someways I'll be able to relate, and your poetry would have helped.

You always write amazingly well, no matter the subject - absolutely adore this!!

Hugs.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

Thank you lovely lady. It's so nice to see you! Hugs, Julie



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This was really beautiful. I mean, I'm one for a lot of rhyme scheme, but I DID like all of the abstract ideas you wrote about in this and I could really relate. Amazing job. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie
Lexi-Lu

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)
Wonderful, the emotions we feel when reading something so wonderful. Love the format and the cadence in this piece, Julie. Though it ends a bit sad, it was fun to discover and read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

Thank you :) Julie
Your mastery of form poetry is incredible
But more than the form is the ease of the rhyme
And how you are able to tell the story so brilliantly.


This one ROCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!

TRACE.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

I think you're being too generous with the mastery of form poetry, but thank you. I'm attempting to.. read more
Interesting style.
A fun read.
Enjoyed it.
Scott

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

Just playing with a serpentine verse. thank you Scott. :) Julie
Wow, an trully brilliant work! You are a very talented writer.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

You are very kind Ana. Thank you :) Julie
A new year and Julie is bringing in a newish poetic form year new A. errrr... ok I will never write a Julie style "serpentine" ... but I will always value a "serpentine Julie... sheesh, I think I will leave these type of poems to your wonderful pen and I will be happy reading... Happy New Year Julie, may your ink never run dry and your serpentines smile.. ;0)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

Happy New Year! I hope your holidays were wonderful. :) Julie
Loved the overall theme as well as the provocative picture, you've got here. A true crime of passion it depicts but also the demise of a familiar superstition, a black cat crossing a scorned lover's path. Quite indicative. Nice work. An intriguing write & read. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

I thought the black cat added a nice little touch. Paul Roberts is such an amazing artist. You shou.. read more
Wow Julie, that was great. I haven't seen this format before.
Nice job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

9 Years Ago

Thank you Ana :) Julie
Very good, Julie. Dangerous lady with the gun. Cat didn't seem to like her too. But yes, if his love wasn't what it seemed, a crime of passion is never far away. :) Rudi

Posted 9 Years Ago


MsJewel

9 Years Ago

I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one. Thanks so much Rudi :) Julie
that's my problem ,I was writing about a dream and I awoke
never did get to finish must have been that dream thief lol

Posted 9 Years Ago


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MsJewel

9 Years Ago

gotta watch those dream theives Ron! :) julie

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