The Black Poison

This is a poem about anger. The anger of men.

Black poison swims through the air in smoky tendrils. You breathe it in and it courses through your veins like some miracle medicine. Your fists clench and you can see the hot dense air radiating from you. You begin to sweat, you face becomes blotchy and red as you boil and brood. Your thoughts become irrational, your mind sees things that don’t actually exist; plots and schemes to bring you down. You lash out at any and everything. You take everything personal and hate with all of your being. You think yourself superior and as a ruler…until one day…your own hate becomes the death of you. No one will come to mourn for you, there is no one at your funeral, just a priest reading to an empty room and a casket filled with dead hate, for your anger has made you an enemy to all. Your anger…was the death of you.

Reviews

[Short.Nerd]

Wonderful

[Linear]

Simply brilliant.........I killed my anger long ago, before it killed me I found peace and tranquility in another place, laid down all my demons and insecurities.

Excellent poem :O)

[Matt Shriver]

Wow!! I loved this. So well written and vivid. One of my favorites that you have done.

[emona]

thats beautiful

[Jessi Berlasty]

Your descriptions are really good. I love them. But again, reads as a short story, not a poem. I really like that you use second person point of view. It's a hard thing to come across. It'd be really cool if you wrote a scary story in second person.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

intense, i love it!

[Audrey Howitt]

Your poem gives a good feel for how much anger this person feels and how it turns against the person who holds it. Nice job.

[Brette Medb]

Anger and hate is in all of us and sadly it consumes many people. This is pure honesty and I liked the imagery. You made anger have a personality, an entity unto itself, which in many cases it can seem that way. Brilliant piece.


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[Robin]

nice , hate kills the hater .

[al25]

Good poem. I like the idea of it. You use good imagery to show how you lose control when your angry.