~*Spring*~

Poem about spring....Duh :)

Burrowing animals come out to play

As beautiful flowers bloom.

The wind whispers in joy of rain

And cold subsides with its heartless ways.

Children spin and laugh and giggle

Cats tease and moths wriggle.

Spring takes its time as trees wake with sleepy shivers.

Water thaws, and leaves grow

Pups roll in the green fields.

Kittens are born, horses are foaled.

People are worn from tiring snow.

The new arrivals bring plenty of smiles, and cheers.

 

But then the weather changes.

Swirling winds and slanting hail.

Tornados form a strong gale.

Pups scatter and cower.

Mothers pull them to shelter.

Tornados rip and pull at sleepy trees and blooming flowers.

Then its over.

 

The clouds dissipate.

The sun shines once more.

And everyone comes out to play, and forgets that horrible storm.

Reviews

[Letemdangle]

I like how it lays on the page. It has nice movement and timing. I would suggest not reusing words if possible. For example you have "tornadoes" twice in one stanza. Try "Clashing skies form a strong gale". Perhaps change up the animals to give more variety. For example, instead of mentioning pups twice, in your what should be the third stanza try, "Chicks scatter and cower. Mothers beak pulls them to shelter."

[Short.Nerd]

Nice! Wonderful job:)

[Jessi Berlasty]

"Children spin and laugh and giggle(Either a semicolon or a period needs to be here) Cats tease and moths wriggle." "and forgets (no 's') that horrible storm." It's a beautiful poem. :-)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

simply enchanting! loved every word of it!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

With Spring comes such beauty and newness but it does seem that Mother Nature gets a bit grumpy at times and scares the bedickens out of everyone......well penned.

[Grace Catherine C.]

Really great imagery, very nice.

[Deck_As_Heck]

neat. its a sweet poem at first i was like darn the sweet poem changed sad and then i was happy when it changed to happy again. good write.