Heartbreak World

Heartbreak World

A Poem by Juliet
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A poem about a girl losing love

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Heartbreak World

My heart is breaking

slowly aching

my eyes are dead

staring blankly

Soft voice whispering 

hot breath against my ear

"I love you"

why did you have to take it away

why did you have to abandon me

you stole the words from my lips

then those precious words

given away to

her

demon eyes

flirty smile

at least I'm real

she whispers sweetly in your ear

the quiet words echoing in your mind

"I love you too"

I miss the taste of having you

your touch lingers on my cheek 

I miss those words

those heartbreak words

"I love you"

I'm still here

trapped like an animal

in 

my 

heartbreak

world

© 2011 Juliet


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"My heart is breaking
slowly aching
my eyes are dead
staring blankly"

Right off the back you capture the reader and make them want to read more and know more, and as they continue to read, they see the best part of the poem isn't the beginning. It's the whole thing!

I love this poem and placed it in my favorites. I can also see you making this into a short story as well and think that it would also be great. I see great promise for "Heartbreak World".

Keep up the writing, I will be watching out for your work. ;)

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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very heartful. very viseral. i liked the way its seems almost poured out by feelings alone.

Posted 12 Years Ago


beautiful poem :) that was a good write i love the title

Posted 12 Years Ago


"My heart is breaking
slowly aching
my eyes are dead
staring blankly"

Right off the back you capture the reader and make them want to read more and know more, and as they continue to read, they see the best part of the poem isn't the beginning. It's the whole thing!

I love this poem and placed it in my favorites. I can also see you making this into a short story as well and think that it would also be great. I see great promise for "Heartbreak World".

Keep up the writing, I will be watching out for your work. ;)

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Seattle , WA



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