Sociopath

Sociopath

A Poem by Jupiter Jazz

Her words were honeyed,

Her smile sweet.

Her eyes held a glint,

Her hand held a treat.

Her temperament varied,

Her actions sporadic,

Her conscience was buried,

Her movements mechanic.

Her mind was clear,

Her nerve concrete,

The body lying there,

Pooled blood at her feet.

. . .

. . .

. . .

 

Her shoes were ruined... How sad.

 


 



 2nd - SociopathAll Around contest writing contest

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 A fruit basket!! - Sociopath Strangeness & Charm writing contest

© 2011 Jupiter Jazz


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Oh my god I love this.It's one of your best pieces so far,I love how it flows and works together so well 'Her words were honied,her smile sweet.Her eyes held a glint,her hand held a treat' Love that first part the most,it's like the rest of the poem but it stands out to me :)
Another piece of amazing writing for you Jazz! Keep up the fab work :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Amazing poem JJ. You have described a 'sociopath' to a T! Its chilling to even think about how devoid of feeling and needing the social contact with people and even killing without the slightest bit of remorse. Well done! Thank you for "Keeping the Dream Alive"!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The last line is a triumph!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fabulous write.
You've described a sociopath alright.
Nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

o-m-g this was bery good indeed :) i especially love the last line about her shoes that really topped it off for me :) great job

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yes this killer does seem to have the antisocial personality disorder if that's were you were trying to get at. hm, not many people can actually portray in such a matter because, well its hard for many to think in this way. however this is a really good write, :) i like it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


You are so talented I wish I could write as well

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This piece is really great! It depicts perfectly a sadistic killer with no heart whatsoever. The picture grew and grew in my mind until the very end when I saw the bloodstained shoes in my mind. The rhymes are excellent and everything fits together so well. I love this one, I really do. It's perfect.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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